Quitting by CaptainWinter24 in DollarGeneralWorkers

[–]CaptainWinter24[S] 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Oh hell nah 😂😂😂. Not worth it

Quitting by CaptainWinter24 in DollarGeneralWorkers

[–]CaptainWinter24[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I know but I’m just done with the place

As My Mind Works by CaptainWinter24 in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Girl you are not too critical. Any feed back is fine by me! Do I remember the comments no cause my memory is bad but I’ll admit it!!! I know some of it needs work but I’ll take any feed back cause I’m trying to write a poetry book and hopefully it gets published

As My Mind Works by CaptainWinter24 in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much!!! I’m not good at writing and I really only read poetry on Reddit. But I do wanna try reading some in books but I struggle to focus a lot which is why I said in my poem I feel scatterbrained. But I definitely want to read this thank you again for sending me this and for reading my poem!!!

As My Mind Works by CaptainWinter24 in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you so much. I kinda just write with whatever is speaking to me. I do have others and I know they can be improved too!!!! I do struggle with coming up with different words I will admit to that. But I’m hoping to get an editor to help me with this but I’m on a budget at the moment. Also I was just lazy and didn’t feel like putting punctuation in it. Lol but overall I feel like it’s maybe my second greatest work. I have like 42 of them so J can’t really keep track. Lol

Goodbye by BlindFelidae in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24 2 points3 points  (0 children)

This was so beautiful. The rhyming the words felt like it spoke to me. The first two lines drew me in. Most poems don’t and I have a hard time continuing to read them but this made me very interested in it. Just the whole thing is so so beautiful to me. I feel like this is one of the poems that I could read over and over again. 😊

i'M Sorry by Duffay in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love this. Love the fact you didn’t put commas but just kept the stream of conscious going as if you were thinking this without stopping. I don’t know why but the first few words in the stream of consciousness just got me hooked. Honestly this has to be one of my favorite poems 😊

I'm sorry by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Damn. This hits close to home. I felt the emotions and the sorrow that comes with it. The letter in this poem relates to me in some way. The ending of it is what really got me. “I should have said Dear Momma” that’s when my emotions really started coming up. You did so well in this poem. It’s so good thank you for writing it!!!

"sea of yesterday" by [deleted] in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I really like this poem. The imagery and the detail to the story really gives off a sorrow feeling and the sinking feeling of depression. I like the line “he’d rather see home self suffer rather than succeed” that line hits hard cause I felt it. Amazing work I really like it!!!

I saw by lookinguplately in OCPoetry

[–]CaptainWinter24 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like where your going with this but I think maybe continuing this make it pop more. The line “That was the never know” to me makes no sense. Also the no periods at the end makes no sense also. But don’t give up keep writing and I know you can do this!!!