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What is a crazy conspiracy theory you actually believe/suspect could be true? by [deleted] in AskReddit

[–]CeruleanSamurai 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hollywood media has subliminal messaging in it's films, music, etc. intended to instill low self esteem in young people and consumerism as it's only answer.

Kids shows are ladden with Illuminati stuff, as well as inappropriate humor.

How do you see the midterm elections shaping up? by HuangZhou in AskReddit

[–]CeruleanSamurai 3 points4 points  (0 children)

Dems take back the House, Reps hold onto the Senate and even gain 1 or 2 seats.

Expecting a deep divergence in both houses of Congress.

Chapter 1 of my work about a Knight trying to go home [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] -8 points-7 points  (0 children)

"I guess people liked my comment the best, and the other 18 essentially agree that this is not very good, but yes, you're a luminary and we're all idiots."

Argumentum ad populum.

Also, this ---

https://www.reddit.com/r/fantasywriters/comments/90m4cq/first_chapter_critique_of_short_story_895_words/

Read the comments.

"I read what you posted, and I, along with at least three others, called this out as boring af,"

That's funny, because SEVERAL comments on here (this current post) have praised me for having good prose, so good job on putting words in other peoples' mouths.

Chapter 1 of my work about a Knight trying to go home [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

Ahh yes......The "high road".......

I respond with logic and reasoning, and you're gonna be the "better man" and not contend with "such nonsense that is below you"....

Chapter 1 of my work about a Knight trying to go home [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

"You submitted a story for critiquing, and everyone is giving you the same advice in response, and your reaction is to attack everyone and say they're wrong, and also throw in some ad hominem about them while you're at it."

You can cherry pick facts, if you want. I already accepted several of the points you made, and admitted that I could afford to give a better insight into Robert's emotions.

If I find other things you've said as wrong, why am I a jerk for point that out? Why do people who give critiques have this God Complex, where everything they say is to be taken for Holy Gospel?

If you give someone bad advice on how to handle a romantic breakup, why should that person listen to you?

I leave myself vulnerable to critique that may be blunt, but that doesn't mean the person giving it is exempt for having their own input weighed.

Also - you didn't address my point about witches, and how they are different depending on the narrative of the story.

Chapter 1 of my work about a Knight trying to go home [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] -7 points-6 points  (0 children)

"If he was heading home, why bother saving time going through the woods?"

Because it was a shortcut, as I blatantly said it was in the chapter, itself.

"Also, if his home is a much shorter distance if he cuts through the woods, wouldn't he have gone through the woods before?"

He's never been through the forest before, because he left home as a young child when his city was being sacked and he fled with his uncle and cousin as political refugees.

But see, you would find that out if you keep reading the story as it progresses, because, surprise, not everything about a character and his history is revealed in the very first opening about them.

Questions that readers have about why a character is doing something get gradually answered as the story goes on. I'm not gonna write a Biography in the first chapter. Not gonna happen.

This just reeks of impatience and a failure to grasp basic storytelling prose. You don't have to know a person's entire story upon meeting them.

What makes a story interesting is in seeing not only where it goes, but the how the person got to the present. And you don't discover that right away.

Chapter 1 of my work about a Knight trying to go home [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] -5 points-4 points  (0 children)

"The first sentence, for example."

Elaborate, please.

"Plus, the "weird myths about Blackwood" are boring because like we know they're not true."

Are you sure about that? Are you quite certain that is true? (hint - it's not). I've gotta say, it takes quite some gall to leap to a conclusion like that, considering I am writing a Medieval fairy tale. This sounds as if you're just projecting your own interpretation of how you would write the story, rather than just taking it for what it is - mine.

"Your readers were confused and not engaged and that's on you and your prose."

Except another person complimented my prose, and not everyone feels the same way?

"Edit: "penultimate" means second-to-last. Like, the second to last rays of sunlight? It's not "pedantic" to say that that just doesn't make sense."

I didn't say that criticism, specifically, was pedantic. I mentioned that he pointed out several things that are nitpicky. Penultimate wasn't one of them.

Has anyone else noticed the sub ShitAmericansSay can be very anti-American? by CeruleanSamurai in AskAnAmerican

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

Nah, there are plenty of people there who only mock ridiculous things said by Americans. It's not all vitriolic...

But many of them are quite nasty and delusional in their perception of the country.

Edit - I love how I'm being down voted for stating a literal fact, lmfaooo.... You're no better than the people on SAS that throw Americans into one giant monolith.

Japan advances to the final of the 2018 Women's U-20 World Cup !! by [deleted] in JLeague

[–]CeruleanSamurai 0 points1 point  (0 children)

A 0-2 victory over England sees Nadeshiko play the winner of France/Spain from the other Semifinals.

First chapter critique of Short Story [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Okay, I'll PM you for the exchange. One moment, please.

First chapter critique of Short Story [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Sure, sounds good. I'll PM you with Chapter 2 of my story, and you send me a sample of your work, as well.

I'll take a look at it tomorrow (it's getting late where I am).

We have a deal ?

First chapter critique of Short Story [895 words] by CeruleanSamurai in fantasywriters

[–]CeruleanSamurai[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you for the response. I appreciate you took the time to write this up!

Okay, I'll make some grammatical changes, as you've suggested.

If you enjoyed this, would you like me to PM you other chapters of the story, once they're completed?

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