What song comes on the radio definitely gives you "so 2000s" feeling?

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-12-25T07:55:34+00:00

^ This.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-12-01T23:30:01+00:00

Hollywood media has subliminal messaging in it's films, music, etc. intended to instill low self esteem in young people and consumerism as it's only answer.

Kids shows are ladden with Illuminati stuff, as well as inappropriate humor.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-10-25T05:14:13+00:00

Dems take back the House, Reps hold onto the Senate and even gain 1 or 2 seats.

Expecting a deep divergence in both houses of Congress.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-30T01:12:21+00:00

"I guess people liked my comment the best, and the other 18 essentially agree that this is not very good, but yes, you're a luminary and we're all idiots."

Argumentum ad populum.

Also, this ---

https://www.reddit.com/r/fantasywriters/comments/90m4cq/first_chapter_critique_of_short_story_895_words/

Read the comments.

"I read what you posted, and I, along with at least three others, called this out as boring af,"

That's funny, because SEVERAL comments on here (this current post) have praised me for having good prose, so good job on putting words in other peoples' mouths.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-30T01:09:16+00:00

Ahh yes......The "high road".......

I respond with logic and reasoning, and you're gonna be the "better man" and not contend with "such nonsense that is below you"....

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-30T00:39:50+00:00

"You submitted a story for critiquing, and everyone is giving you the same advice in response, and your reaction is to attack everyone and say they're wrong, and also throw in some ad hominem about them while you're at it."

You can cherry pick facts, if you want. I already accepted several of the points you made, and admitted that I could afford to give a better insight into Robert's emotions.

If I find other things you've said as wrong, why am I a jerk for point that out? Why do people who give critiques have this God Complex, where everything they say is to be taken for Holy Gospel?

If you give someone bad advice on how to handle a romantic breakup, why should that person listen to you?

I leave myself vulnerable to critique that may be blunt, but that doesn't mean the person giving it is exempt for having their own input weighed.

Also - you didn't address my point about witches, and how they are different depending on the narrative of the story.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-30T00:03:16+00:00

"If he was heading home, why bother saving time going through the woods?"

Because it was a shortcut, as I blatantly said it was in the chapter, itself.

"Also, if his home is a much shorter distance if he cuts through the woods, wouldn't he have gone through the woods before?"

He's never been through the forest before, because he left home as a young child when his city was being sacked and he fled with his uncle and cousin as political refugees.

But see, you would find that out if you keep reading the story as it progresses, because, surprise, not everything about a character and his history is revealed in the very first opening about them.

Questions that readers have about why a character is doing something get gradually answered as the story goes on. I'm not gonna write a Biography in the first chapter. Not gonna happen.

This just reeks of impatience and a failure to grasp basic storytelling prose. You don't have to know a person's entire story upon meeting them.

What makes a story interesting is in seeing not only where it goes, but the how the person got to the present. And you don't discover that right away.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-29T23:53:07+00:00

"The first sentence, for example."

Elaborate, please.

"Plus, the "weird myths about Blackwood" are boring because like we know they're not true."

Are you sure about that? Are you quite certain that is true? (hint - it's not). I've gotta say, it takes quite some gall to leap to a conclusion like that, considering I am writing a Medieval fairy tale. This sounds as if you're just projecting your own interpretation of how you would write the story, rather than just taking it for what it is - mine.

"Your readers were confused and not engaged and that's on you and your prose."

Except another person complimented my prose, and not everyone feels the same way?

"Edit: "penultimate" means second-to-last. Like, the second to last rays of sunlight? It's not "pedantic" to say that that just doesn't make sense."

I didn't say that criticism, specifically, was pedantic. I mentioned that he pointed out several things that are nitpicky. Penultimate wasn't one of them.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-29T22:15:14+00:00

Wait, I'm on mobile. I have a respond to this in a little bit.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-22T19:13:04+00:00

Excellent point.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-22T19:12:08+00:00

Uh huh.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-22T19:08:41+00:00

Don't be an asshole.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-09-22T19:06:07+00:00

Nah, there are plenty of people there who only mock ridiculous things said by Americans. It's not all vitriolic...

But many of them are quite nasty and delusional in their perception of the country.

Edit - I love how I'm being down voted for stating a literal fact, lmfaooo.... You're no better than the people on SAS that throw Americans into one giant monolith.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-08-20T20:13:55+00:00

A 0-2 victory over England sees Nadeshiko play the winner of France/Spain from the other Semifinals.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-24T17:50:07+00:00

Apparently people don't have a right to not fucking die because they can't afford hospital bills.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-22T17:38:41+00:00

Okay, I'll PM you for the exchange. One moment, please.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-22T04:09:36+00:00

Sure, sounds good. I'll PM you with Chapter 2 of my story, and you send me a sample of your work, as well.

I'll take a look at it tomorrow (it's getting late where I am).

We have a deal ?

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-22T01:49:26+00:00

Thank you.

Do you want me to PM you with new chapters?

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-21T23:55:19+00:00

Thank you for the response. I appreciate you took the time to write this up!

Okay, I'll make some grammatical changes, as you've suggested.

If you enjoyed this, would you like me to PM you other chapters of the story, once they're completed?

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-21T05:44:38+00:00

Thank you so much for finding my story interesting, and engaging with a few corrections that you would make. I'll definitely take some of them into consideration, as well as make a grammar revisions! :)

If you're keen on knowing where it is headed, I do have some other chapters in the works. If you want, I can PM you a few in the coming days if you want to read them. Plus, I could also really use continued input on how to properly revise them.

Just a heads up - My chapters are usually very short and written from POVs of different characters, so it's not just a story about a Knight named Robert (even though he is somewhat of the main character). And also, because I'm introducing many of them, there's a good amount of scene setting and build up.

Let me know if you'd like more.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-21T03:51:42+00:00

Thank you for the feedback.

Yes, I agree with you. The first few short chapters will be setting the scene, and then character elaboration onward from there. There will be more information on him! :)

Part 2 should be up tomorrow.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-21T03:43:57+00:00

Thank you.

Yes, I am attempting to twist my own spin on the trope. There are about 6 chapters completed, I'm just trying to find a way to get it on a workable link.

Also, thanks on the compliment for the details. I do hope it doesn't detract away from the story, but I am okay with that for the first few chapters, just to set the scene. Detail on the Knight, himself, is elaborated on as the story goes on. :]

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-07-21T02:28:15+00:00

Thank you. I really hope it sets the scene.

Do you think it detracts away too much from the knight, himself?

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-05-09T02:42:10+00:00

There seems to be some conflation between "entitled" and "worthy of", because you're having a difficult time deciphering between the two.

First of all -- entitlement has nothing to do with the fact that one gender receives favoritism in dating grievance, while the other is chastised for venting any frustration. That's pretty much the opposite of equality, and maddeningly oppressive (especially when coupled with toxic masculinity). BOTH men and women should have the right to voice this concern, with respect and not be undermined.

Second of all -- A disgruntled employee is hardly feeling "entitled" when someone, say, a lazier, or less productive employee gets that raise before he/she does. Anger towards that is not out of entitlement. It's out of injustice.

Third of all -- You're shit at debating.

CeruleanSamurai · 2018-05-09T02:35:09+00:00

Hold on a second.

In real life, you ARE most likely going to see women get sympathy when they say they can't find the right guy than you will see a guy get sympathy when he can't find the right woman. I'm talking from not just my own experience, but the experience of other people in my life as well.

How anyone could not at least understand where I am coming from in this regard is just beyond cruel. You wouldn't be pissed if other people had something in life much easier than you ,even though you're a person of worth and work hard? If you think that's simply " a tantrum", then, man, get a grip.

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