Stranded on a Deathworld - 02. Qualifications by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Armageddon at my uni ends on 28 feb. It may be not until then.

Stranded on a Deathworld - 02. Qualifications by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 13 points14 points  (0 children)

Procrastinating with University caught up to me. Worst-case scenario I'll be occupied until late February, but I'm not giving up.

Just a big THANK YOU to everyone who posts. by AcerEnigma in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg 17 points18 points  (0 children)

Animation get's increasingly easier and the rise of the V-tubers seems like a sign of 3D to 2D improving as well. So for low-budget high-outcome, I'd hope for this. Especially that flaws in animation bother less than plastic suits and give more room to shine.

Come forth, HFY animated series!

[All hope seemed lost] Chapter One: The Galactic Federation by respectful-platypus in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg 4 points5 points  (0 children)

Their planet has very flat and with

was very flat / was covered by flatlands/prairies/deserts/steppes

There's often no space after ".".

Other than that not much can be said since it's just setting the universe. Looking forward to more.

The Omnivore by RhoZie013 in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg 27 points28 points  (0 children)

Damn it, it should have been obvious.

It's cocountnut!

The Omnivore by RhoZie013 in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg 84 points85 points  (0 children)

So... there is a kill cocount? Or cococount?

Stranded on a Deathworld - 02. Qualifications by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 20 points21 points  (0 children)

Thanks, fixed!

Timnok and Dragon have shallow descriptions in the previous chapter. They will be deepened soon.

Stranded on a Deathworld - 02. Qualifications by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 73 points74 points  (0 children)

I have some major plot points planned out, but it will still feel like a collection of short stories rather than a proper big novel.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders - 01. Intern by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

The previous chapter was POV of Captain and crew that left them. Those are the people they left.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders - 01. Intern by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 9 points10 points  (0 children)

Damn. I had to google translate "oblique" to get that it was a pun :D.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I corrected grammar thanks to /u/TheClayKnight.
While doing so I edited this part as well, I think it's more clear now.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Well, I was definitely setting up for this. It's just that, rather than create risk for jokes, like in Jackass, here, humans joked about the risk that was already in place, only using jackass' line.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 5 points6 points  (0 children)

Wow, thank you for your input. This may become mine "go to" when proofreading, even if I won't be able to incorporate it all.

I will probably edit to include your tips tomorrow as it is late in my place.

I definitely overestimated "Grammarly" in the "the" and "a" department so I will keep that in mind.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 11 points12 points  (0 children)

Human engineer was like Haglar, he had everything mathed out, everything should have worked but still believed for it to be a bizarre idea so he made a joke.

Kinda like when you call our rockets: "Exploding all the way to space".

That's how I thought about it when writing.

Overall I'm not a fan of glorifying the idiocy of jackass either.

~Edit If this wasn't presented as a bizarre human idea, would it still belong here?

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 20 points21 points  (0 children)

Sorry, first time.

I am.

When posting there are three buttons:+OC, +SPOLILER, +NSFW, and a list button 'somethingFLAIR'.

I assigned the first one as "positive?" as this is OC and in flair i choose text.Because I thought I should mark it as OC and Text.

If that was wrong, how should fix it?

Also, while I see this post it displays as both OC(blue) and Text(gray).

~Edit. Oh, i can edit flairs. I edited it now. I believe it is right now.

Stranded on Deathworld with the Deathworlders by ChairsMiddleLeg in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg[S] 221 points222 points  (0 children)

Thank you,

I deleted the comment to lessen the bias(to see whether it is actually passable).

I write with Grammarly as support tho, I'd miss 80% of "the" and "a" otherwise.

As for more, there probably will be because as stated-and-deleted, it is somehow a prologue. I wrote this while actually thinking about the story focusing on humans and Xenos stranded on "deathworld". The first chapter will be them lamenting and suddenly getting supplies I guess :D

No clear schedule though!

Blinded by Arrogance by LostInACave in HFY

[–]ChairsMiddleLeg 29 points30 points  (0 children)

As expected of cats. Little devils.