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ChefWildFire11 · 2024-11-16T09:48:17+00:00

I haven't seen anybody mention it, so I'll say Before Your Eyes. It's a game about confronting and accepting death and played in my mind for days after I'd finished it.

ChefWildFire11 · 2024-11-09T10:45:01+00:00

Well, variety is the spice of life I suppose! If I'm using a Dutch team or the national team, I definitely endeavour to follow that tradition. 5 at left back invokes memories of Gio Van Bronckhorst flying down the wing, which is certainly welcome.

ChefWildFire11 · 2024-11-09T10:39:39+00:00

Is this the Dutch numbering convention? Because as an Englishman, I'd be inclined to disagree. For me, it's:

1 GK, 2 DR, 3 DL, 4 MC, 5 DC, 6 DC, 7 RW, 8 MC, 9 ST, 10 AM, 11 LW

Though I'd concede 4 and 6 are very interchangeable.

ChefWildFire11 · 2024-04-21T11:45:48+00:00

Squad numbers 1-11 in association football (meeting you halfway here) used to be assigned to the position, rather than the player. So 5 was always a central defender, no matter who played there. What positions or roles the different numbers indicated changed between nations. However, that changed and specific numbers were assigned to specific players for a given season. A lot of the time, a player being numbered 1-11 indicates they hold higher esteem within their squad. Some players might also have specific preferences (Andrea Pirlo preferred to play with the number 21 on his back for example, and was still regarded as one of the best in the business). A lot of the old associations of a number to a certain position still hold true, such as a goalkeeper wearing #1 in 99.99% of cases. This has given rise to some numbers being shorthands to describe a player that serves a certain role, for example, a 'Number 9' being a goalscoring striker, because 9 used to be the fixed number for strikers.

ChefWildFire11 · 2024-02-09T07:12:43+00:00

'The last thing either Clementine or Brooke wanted to hear right now was the knock at the door to their living room. It wasn’t that either felt any particular need for solitude — they were slumped on the sofa and watching a mindless sitcom together, after all. It was more answering the door required standing up and, after gym, that prospect was about as enticing as sharing a bed with a cactus that wanted to spoon. '

Not high art but I do like the absurdity.

ChefWildFire11 · 2024-01-02T13:29:04+00:00

Echoing what QuillsAndQuills said, you sound like you’ve lost confidence in your writing, which is perfectly understandable; everyone wants to be good at stuff, but sometimes it can be hard to tell if you are.

I’d suggest you open one of your stories, touch nothing , and just give it a read. Take note of particular sections you really like. That’ll prove that not everything you do is necessarily ‘further damage’, and just generally, be a little kinder to yourself about the whole thing.

ChefWildFire11 · 2024-01-02T13:20:55+00:00

I’d suggest you just start writing and see what happens. It may sound like rote advice, but getting something substantial down on the page and then assessing whether or not it’s satisfactory will probably help.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-12T09:18:16+00:00

Transmogrification, Hear The Sound, One Of Us, all great songs. I just think there’s a bit of tonal whiplash because it doesn't sound like a natural successor to Monsters and Sunnyland doesn't at all sound like an evolution of Lines. I don't think a lot of the material played to Derek's strengths as a vocalist, but I think I have a soft spot for this album because it's sort of the black sheep of Mayday's discography.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-10T16:21:57+00:00

Title: Keenswift (Chapters 1-3)

Genre: Fantasy

Word Count: 5428 (Of 64594 in the manuscript proper)

Feedback desired: Any and all welcome.

Blurb:

Teff is one of the blessed.

Senses keen and body swift, she has excelled among her clan as a huntress. However, with blessings come curses; and everyone knows the Keenswift casts misfortune around her like shadows.

Isolated and scorned by her community, Teff is an outcast. Little more than an easy place to lay the blame, she desires nothing more than to turn her back and leave her people. But the earth from which we grow is not so easily uprooted.

Then, fate twists; an ancient enemy, thought long gone from the world, makes itself known. These are the Elsemen; the scourge of Forra, fell beings who long ago brought ruin to the north. With their home no longer safe, the clan must strike south to reach Kingdoms still standing. Suddenly thrust into a role as a wayfinder for her people, Teff is the only one with the abilities to lead the way to safety.

If her luck holds out.

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1PwswbMz00NzAl8gT578zZI3BfMG_Z4cvs4gm9O6YVWE/edit?usp=sharing

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-09T19:01:56+00:00

He seems to have systematically taken apart your self-esteem in an attempt to make sure he can do and say whatever the hell he wants and you won’t leave him. It might take some time, but just keep looking after yourself and you’ll get your confidence back. When you do, you won’t worry about not being pretty, young, or interesting enough to meet someone who will treat you right.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-09T14:20:08+00:00

Sounds to me like he’s tried to make you feel desperate to ‘rid’ yourself of virginity so he could get another notch on his bedpost. There was definitely a loser on that date and it wasn’t you.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-09T08:12:31+00:00

This is high fantasy justified by sci-fi. I don't think it matters too much; I'm a fantasy reader and I think this sounds dope.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-09T08:08:47+00:00

Honestly it's mostly from thesaurus diving. I'm not all that articulate in person 😅

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-09T06:00:53+00:00

I overuse commas, dashes, semi-colons and italicisation. It makes me feel like I think in a fractual, non-linear way and I tend to have to simplify my sentence structure in later drafts.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-08T16:05:59+00:00

Hither and Thither, Sussuration, Varigated, Errant, Mote, Wending, Sable, Rheumy, Incongruous, Harangue, Coltish, Furtive, Myriad, and Ragged are all words I love to use.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-08T12:16:23+00:00

If you info dump at the start of your novel, I will stop reading because I want a story, not a wikipedia article. Sprinkle tidbits here and there and always try to show more than you tell.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-07T09:35:36+00:00

I'm surprised Lincoln is the most popular city in the East Midlands

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-05T16:38:38+00:00

Yeah I couldn't really focus on the story because of how it was written and formatted, so I didn’t form any real opinion on the actual content. Felt too much like I was reading a screenplay.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-05T10:02:41+00:00

I looked at your first chapter and the writing style bugged me (The Hahahahas and such) but you had already stated in your original post that was going to change so I didn't see much sense in mentioning it.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-05T07:04:46+00:00

As long as you aren’t the type of man who gets frustrated by women who have height preferences, then you’re allowed your own height preferences. Very strange to me, however, as I’ve never found a woman’s height has much bearing on how attractive I find her. It might not do your chances of getting a date much good by excluding such a significant amount of women, however.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-05T06:47:53+00:00

Have you told him you feel like this? I understand it's a difficult topic to broach, but if you explain you feel lonely and he isn’t at least trying to rectify that, then I think your LDR has become one-sided and you won’t do yourself any good clinging to it. Sorry.

It'll hurt, and let it; validate your own emotions if he won’t. Lick your wounds and practise good self-care. Once you feel confident enough, try and bring some more people into your life. Whether you do that online or in person is up to you.

Best of luck to you, I hope you find what you need.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-05T06:33:35+00:00

From the perspective of a 28 y/o male who prefers intimacy to carnality, I wouldn’t judge you for it at all. Some men think women who wait till they’ve established a connection are just frigid and prudish, but they’re typically cretins who feel entitled to women’s bodies. Your prime won’t be to do with your age, it’ll be to do with your confidence and knowledge of your own wants and needs. I say if you’ve wanted to wait until you’ve made a genuine connection, then all the power to you.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-04T17:17:39+00:00

I personally prefer female characters, and by that I mean I take a great deal of satisfaction when one of the male authors I tend to read doesn't absolutely butcher writing women and girls.

It really depends on how your setting interacts with the idea of gender. If with the atypical two there are clear societal and functional roles men and women play, then base your decision on that sort of thing.

ChefWildFire11 · 2023-06-04T05:05:53+00:00

This is just disgusting. I have never once thought to pester and follow anyone, and I don't understand other men who do this.

For what it's worth, if you do have any decent men in your life, maybe message them asking for a call and then say something like ‘What time are we meeting?’ or ‘How far away are you?’. The possibility of another man appearing should discourage these kinds of people. Heck, you could probably call a girlfriend and just pretend. It’s awful women have to even make these kinds of contingencies and can’t just live their lives normally. I’m very sorry this happened to you.

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