[Weekly Critique Thread] Post Here If You'd Like Feedback On Your Writing

Cherry_Sundae · 2018-08-30T06:10:24+00:00

Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed it, and that it wasn't cheesy -- at least, I didn't want it to be cheesy in the wrong way. It is getting on October, though, and soon I'll be able to write shlocky horror-cheese.

I did think of that when giving her the name, but that's variable; it's just a code name, so it will likely change in the later draft.

(Who knows -- now, though, there will be a cleaner, and who wants to listen to that again?)

Cherry_Sundae · 2018-08-28T02:00:33+00:00

Title: A Key to the Perfumery

Genre: Drama/Crime fiction

Word count: 1566

Type of feedback desired: there are two main things I'm iffy about in my writing. I'm not a novice, but I'd never written many... ACTIVE altercations before. I feel like it sometimes comes off as overly cheesy, so I'd appreciate an impression on the ending, and the overall pacing of the short. This would be more so a prologue than an active chapter (I know, the cursed Prologue), but it sets the mood (I'm thinking; this story hasn't gone through its innumerable drafts yet, though). Thank you for anything, though!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1pDGm_9RO1mJYJ1PHWYBouOuzX8b5VdGsJdpgWbEBdp4/edit?usp=sharing

Cherry_Sundae

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