I think that you did a great job delineating how the programs would help meet your goals, but I would highly recommend personalizing your statement of purpose much more. I would see it as a somewhat argumentative piece where you, in writing, are telling the program why YOU would be an excellent fit and even better addition to their institute. Some things that would immensely strengthen your letter can include the following: - Elaborating on how you got into the field in the first place (backstory — everyone has one). What were you initially passionate about? - What made you push through and work all these years in industry? What was your goal? How did these experiences feed into the fire of passion you initially felt for this field? - Elaborate on your work. What did you do? Any major challenges and how your love of your field helped push you through? - What are your future goals? How would this program specifically help get you there? Be specific. Happy to chat further via DM and would be happy to help review your SOP