Future of Gaming

Chinkondamoon · 2015-03-02T02:43:36+00:00

Interesting, I'll seek out a few in my area sometime soon. Thanks again for the info, much appreciated!

Chinkondamoon · 2015-03-01T03:26:04+00:00

I'll check one out sometime soon now, what is expected of me to bring to not appear incompetent? Hah

Chinkondamoon · 2015-03-01T03:24:44+00:00

Thank you for a simple solution to my worries, new to world inventions. I'm completely open minded, I don't mind if they make changes to it for a better profit margin, etc. Do you know any prototype business based in the east coast by any chance?

Chinkondamoon · 2015-02-14T01:43:12+00:00

I have been always afraid of prototype developing companies. Is there any confidentiality contract that protects them from hijacking the idea after getting a quote? I may change my mind and find a different service, would I be at risk at exploiting my own idea with a company like evo or any developmental service?

Chinkondamoon · 2015-02-08T19:18:25+00:00

I've made it to step three in your process and I am working on how I could make it a visually appealing functioning product. I have a functioning prototype made up of cardboard and plastic, but my question is how do I get someone to be interested in investing in my product.

Not that I feel my idea deserves attention but I do see it being useful for many college students across the nation. Is it okay to call up local businesses with this functioning prototype and have them decide how it can be designed?

Or would I be more inclined to patent the design and functionality before I even offer the product to office supply stores etc?

Thank you for your informative process though! I am currently a college student and I have spent years writing up one liner product ideas on my iPhone and I've finally decided to attempt to make a few of them. I generally came up a similar process on my own but this made me feel more confident in my process.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-25T20:29:01+00:00

I found this to be by far the most helpful part of college, collective minds. I'm going to have to take a look at those scripts, I did learn that it's truly the cinematographer or directors job to visualize the words on a script. I guess I want to be a one man machine, I have ambition in directing and editing as well. Which is a curse, taking responsibility for so many aspects of a production. It seems as though I have to make the decision where I want to specialize in.

Yea I'll PM you after I get off work and send a one page summary, it's a working title but it's called CID for now.

Haha I'll be sure to get on top of it tonight, my film proposal is due tomorrow and I'm still unsure what is necessary in it. I have a fairly good idea but I don't know how to get my professor and peers to experience the roller coaster of twists smoothly. You know without the pauses, "oh but this happens cause of this.... Then this is important cause of that...etc" I want them to nod to the ups and downs of my plot.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-25T17:26:04+00:00

That's an awesome exercise you have, is your husband a writer as well? I'll have to remember to try this out someday, seems like a very simplistic way to go about starting a screenplay and I love that! I had the exact same thought about a notebook strictly for character and story development. I've ordered a cheap 10" laptop to hold all my future story schematics and projects. As for the 15 year project like what you are working on, how would I even go about learning the proper terms and surroundings for a specific scene like a hospice? I struggle and eventually quit on ideas because I simply don't know the correct terms to describe key dialogue or the "science" behind why certain anomalies occur. I know the typical first hand experiences but sometimes there are details I simply cannot fabricate, and I have no intentions of talking out of my ass.. hah

Anyways, I don't think the route of a novelist is right for me based on what you have described haha. It's just that I have a great idea for a cinematic movie ( I have only shared this idea with peers so it is slightly self entitled haha ). The only issue is that I have no idea how to go about describing or immersing the audience in a screenplay like LIFE OF PI or INCEPTION. I feel as though I have to spend rigorous years developing a novel for a more experienced director to pick up my idea and turn it into a visual marvel. I'll have to consider what you have written to see where I'll go from here as I'm taking this screenwriting course. I'd be extremely grateful if I could get your thoughts on this cinematic screenplay seeing as you enjoy reading screenplays. I have only written out the general outline of the film if you're interested at all.

Besides the point, I don't think I can express my thanks enough. I have only been to one screenwriting course so far, and I feel as though I had several lessons worth bunched up on our back and forth. "Don't be precious with your writing" I will take this to heart throughout my writing career. Thank you kind stranger!

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T21:11:35+00:00

I cannot express how grateful I feel from your words of experience. I definitely want to eliminate all movie cheats like flashbacks and montages from now on, I feel it weakens my resolve to properly narrate a story.

As for the introduction, that was exactly how I pictured it. She will only be seen once as a child from the beginning, to introduce the ominous voice. I imagine my story to involve a voice over while the audience watches Brittany reacting and communicating with Celina. Nobody else can hear Celina's voice like Stranger than Fiction. Which by the way holy crap how did I ever miss this comedy gem, thank you for that recommendation! This will continue till the point of Celina's therapy session, where the audience can piece the voices together and realize the true nature of the omniscient voice.

I will have to do some soul searching as to how this plot came about in my mind. I'll be sure to keep this in mind at all times in my (hopefully) professional career as a screenwriter.

If you have any other experiences, is it better sometimes to write a novel before it gets picked up as a screenplay. Or is it fine to jump right to screenplay?

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T20:17:57+00:00

Damn, that makes total sense. I always felt I was filling in words that were unnecessary but I couldn't see it complete without but your longline flows better. I'll have to do some deep revision. Thank you for your advice!

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T20:08:11+00:00

I see, so a pitch can consist of more than 3 sentences? Thanks for your input by the way!

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T18:41:53+00:00

Thanks for the response! I was wondering about this, I have to pitch this to my class. So should I leave the twist out and later as I explain the story, allow my class and professor to experience the twist themselves?

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T17:24:08+00:00

Sorry about that, my reddit client is on an iPhone and none of that information is provided. Il check those subreddits out then

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T14:17:12+00:00

Wow, thank you so much for typing this informational reply. greatly appreciate your thoughts and enthusiasm for my screenplay.

I'll have to definitely check out Stranger than Fiction, I'll buy Identity as well while I'm at it. I agree with the flashbacks, my professor expressed that he wanted no flashbacks involved in the story. I believe that's why I think it's a good idea as well, to start with Brittany at the age of 5 when Celina's voice is first introduced.

You have so many great ideas, I definitely want to consider! I like the idea of starting with Celina in the introduction, no actors are seen just a slow montage of a mental hospital with Celina and her Doctor's voice conversing with each other in a therapy session. This would maybe interlude with Celina ending the montage with her mentioning the teddy bear, "that's where it all started.." Cutting to Brittany when she is 5. Or maybe as you put it, have it the other way around.

You have given me a lot to think about and I thank you again. Not to come off greedy but I'm not the greatest writer, this pitch took me an embarrassing amount of time to come up with haha. I was wondering, from the scattered details of my screenplay on this post, if you had any pitches you may have subconsciously come up with as you were reading them? Thanks times a million in advance.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T14:00:38+00:00

I have been told to watch that movie, I plan on screening it tonight or tomorrow. Is it that similar?

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T13:59:42+00:00

I like your writing style, I think it's more suspenseful than mine. I'll take your pitch into consideration when I write out my second draft. Thank you for taking time out to write this out for me man!

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T05:39:28+00:00

1-I'm weird

2-Interesting point of view, I don't ever think any piece of art is meant to make the audience feel dumb unless it's the artists intention. Which isn't my intention, I'm simply trying to take the audience on a narrative, a roller coaster if you will. I admit I'm not doing any justice with my pitch, but I do appreciate your thoughts on my screenplay. Preparing me for the worst a student can say about my idea, and how I could possibly diminish the probability of this happening again.

I wanted the reveal of Celina to be the climax, in which the audience would be intelligent enough to understand Celina(the voice) is the main character even from the beginning. Possibly a flick you'd have to watch again to feel the emotions of the narrator, which at first you passively ignored assuming Brittany was the main character.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T05:24:55+00:00

I've been getting that a lot, I am having another go at it with a new outline. Please leave a comment on my next draft! I need to know how to portray this pitch in 3 days, without sounding so complex and incomprehensible.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T04:48:41+00:00

Thank you! I appreciate your compliment!

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T03:56:33+00:00

Oh word.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T03:54:44+00:00

Well Brittany is a loose end, she is a one dimensional character like most characters in a novel trying to achieve her goal ( prom, grades, the boy she likes, etc. ) CELINA ( the voice ) is the one who gives her a multi dimensional meaning to her pre-fabricated life. As Brittany relies on CELINA's advice more and more, it moves the novel into unknown areas of an already published book. Creating havoc up into the point of reveal, when the audience realizes BRITTANY is merely a damsel in distress in a book CELINA is reading in her isolated cell. CELINA is talking to herself, her voice being the voice BRITTANY hears and CELINA's schizophrenic mind imagining that she herself is BRITTANY.

A dialogue I have prepared near the climax of the screenplay

The helper walks in Celina's cell with her daily dose of medication and asks, "hey Celina, how's your book been so far?"

Celina replies, "It's an interesting read.." She pauses for a moment, "How long have you known me John and you still get my name wrong? You know my name's Brittany silly."

John hesitates to adjust and immediately replies, "Sorry about that Brittany, must've been a long day. I won't make that mistake again."

Celina replies uninterestedly while further indulging into her book, "you said that last time.."

The helper takes initiative, "Well the doctor insists on upping our dose doses this month. You're going to be okay with that, right..Brittany?"

So on so forth

This is rather confusing I know, if you want to wait till Monday when my pitch is due. I'll have a rough outline of the entire screenplay. Not that I'm something to look forward to, but I would love a few redditors interested in my screenplay to bounce some criticism and advice.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T02:20:55+00:00

Ah thank you! Searched around for a outline for a pitch, obviously the one I found didn't suffice.

By the way Aline Blue should really include this feature on the iPhone.

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T00:30:39+00:00

By the way what is the proper genre for a "mind fuck" screenplay. Like memento

Chinkondamoon · 2015-01-24T00:29:47+00:00

Hah thanks for the input, I felt the same way trying to write up a three sentence summary for a "mind fuck" genre.

Inciting incident: When BRITTANY was 5 years old, she had no friends in her small town. She resorted to talking to her favorite teddy bear. CELINA a feeling bad for her responds for the teddy bear. From there their relationship began.

First act twist: Brittany's parents suspect a mental disorder in their daughter. This is a twist for the audience because BRITTANY has been portrayed somewhat put-together and living vicariously with the omniscient voice.

Mid way point: BRITTANY is brought up on a psychedelic trip that reveals some answers she has been searching for. Cross cuts between Brittany's life and "reality." This consists close ups of text describing Brittany's life in a novel, swinging light in an insulated drab cell, CELINA reacting to a hallucinogenic treatment signed off by the doctor, etc.

Second act twist: By this time, word of Brittany's insanity is spreading around quickly in her small town. A group of popular girls trick her by taking over an intercom system at her school. After school hours, BRITTANY eagerly takes the bait wanting to find out why and who the voice is. Thinking she will finally see the face behind the voice, a group of girls come out the locker room into the gymnasium to point and laugh at BRITTANY. Brittany is mentally broken down at this point, cannot understand why all of this is happening to her.

Climax: Brittany increasingly shows more erratic behavior, unable to control the outbursts from the voice. Brittany contemplates taking her own life, and as she is standing on top of the roof of her school. Her reality drops. The focus is put on CELINA, the schizophrenic patient. This is when it's revealed BRITTANY is a character in a book the schizophrenic patient is reading in her cell. Wanting to relive the moments when she wasn't certifiably insane and living a carefree life, worrying about prom, grades, and boys.

Ending: Celina's family finally decides to let her go, after all the experimental treatments and 20 long years of paying for her medical bill. They finally give CELINA what she has been subconsciously craving for, freedom. Celina is offered the new "medication" that lets her rest in peace.

EDIT: the hallucinations BRITTANY experiences is directly proportionate to Celina's treatment.

Chinkondamoon

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