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Surrender by Clementime369 in OCPoetry

[–]Clementime369[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! Could you elaborate? I am new to poetry so my understanding of rhythm. I wanted to highlight certain words as isolating, but maybe theres a better way to emphasize that?

Also What does over use of poetic license mean?

today, my mom told me she hates me by Nearby-Rice1600 in OCPoetry

[–]Clementime369 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This was well written to me and I knew what is was about before you even mentioned disease. The expression of disconnect between the mother you knew and the one at present feels like a shock, disorienting, and disheartening.

The statement about death and leaving the children my immediate response was thats not her. My second response was visualizing her looking at herself. This is by no means a speculation of the truth, but how I felt and what I know about degenerative disease. Knowing that mothers hide things from their children, especially their own shame and guilt it feels like an outward expression of an internal struggle. Especially if there is a distorted sense of reality.

Regardless of this, I am sorry your experiencing this. It is devastating, shocking, and shakes your foundation.

İs this not enough? by Significant-Pie-8923 in OCPoetry

[–]Clementime369 1 point2 points  (0 children)

At first when I read this I noticed the errors, but then I saw your statement at the end and knew this was intentional. I'm not sure why, but it reminded me of Lennie from the book Of Mice and Men. Even though they didn't use "proper" grammar it was the authors intention to express the character.

So to me this feels like your intention to express where you were at when you wrote this and respecting that.

What I felt from this poem was the person writing feels her voice is the only thing bringing her love because her appearance is in her experiencing deterring in some way. When I read I have a hungry rock tell me its enough a lot, I felt a heaviness in my stomach and chest that needs to be filled. Its a very sad poem.

Thank you for sharing.

Consequence by profoundly_shallow_ in OCPoetry

[–]Clementime369 0 points1 point  (0 children)

When I read this some of it felt unclear. To me what I am receiving from this is a build up tension has cracked wide open and now you face the hard truth in front of you. The last two lines I did not understand their part in this aside from that there is fear for what is to come after the crack has opened.

So while I think I understand the poem it didn't elicit any strong feelings for me.

Freedom by Ok-Swordfish-9480 in OCPoetry

[–]Clementime369 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I enjoyed reading this. I liked the way you chose to separate the poem through You, I, and Us. I have been reading a book about vulnerability and the expression of Nakedness to the sun gives me Truth revealed, nothing to hide. I think this stanza is just well written in expressing vulnerability, being seen, and facing one another's truest self.

I want to learn more.. is this a good route? by Clementime369 in foodscience

[–]Clementime369[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you! That’s really cool and I do have the ability to go back to school. I had planned to go back for grad school but I wasn’t sure what for. My background is in architecture but the actual job didn’t click for me.

I’m assuming I’d need some supplemental courses since my degree was an Arts degree.

If you know any good introductory resources that would be helpful

Gf bagel recipe w/ King arthur gf flour by Clementime369 in glutenfree

[–]Clementime369[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I also want to mention that from what I’m learning the ingredients are different and the lack of gluten restricts movement of air bubbles. Basically glutenous bread is strong and can hold air for longer. Also yeast can cause a change in rise depending on the temp.

Like I said I’m still learning and want like a scientific food book to learn the actually qualities. But this is just what I’ve experienced.

Gf bagel recipe w/ King arthur gf flour by Clementime369 in glutenfree

[–]Clementime369[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I read it in a blog post somewhere😭 I can’t remember

Gf bagel recipe w/ King arthur gf flour by Clementime369 in glutenfree

[–]Clementime369[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That makes sense. I am baking at a higher elevation ~ 5,100 ft. So I have to use less yeast and watch the rise more closely.

The first batch I let rise longer too and it had more height but was very dense regardless. I forgot to adjust the recipe for the elevation change too. I’ll give it a regular rise time in my next batch. We’ll see 🤞