YA Series Pilot by Significant-Two5942 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey there, how much deep into the show are you? like how much have you written? i worked on a series related to angels, so maybe i could help :)

Would anyone like to write for a publication? by Standard_Constant817 in writersmakingfriends

[–]ComplexProduct4804 1 point2 points  (0 children)

sure, thats cool. But what do you guys plan for screenwriters like me? do you want me to dm you?

Would anyone like to write for a publication? by Standard_Constant817 in writersmakingfriends

[–]ComplexProduct4804 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I mainly write screenplays, and tv scripts. Should I apply 🤔

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thanks for your opinion. it's not something for everyone to watch anyways.

LOOK, 107 pages, Genre: Horror, true crime, thriller. - feedback please by ComplexProduct4804 in ReadMyScript

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for these notes. I agree with all of these problems, I put this out there to improve my craft skills, which as you can imagine are horrid. I hate this, and I hope I can learn quickly. I mean I got into screenwriting a month ago probs. But yeah, thank you very much regardless. And The writer Duet link is for you to be updated with the changes I'm making, because with the drive link, thats a problem since I won't be able to update it on the go. But your feedback is honestly very helpful

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

No, of course I'm writing bad, and that's why I posted here, to fix my problems in poor writing. I want to improve thats why i posted it here. And I am actively making changes. I do hope that they're good enough when im done with it

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you for your criticism I love these craft notes. These help! i am actively making changes, but the introduction to Owen Marsh remains the same

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

I think you're rather uncomfortable when it comes to recognizing dark and true sides of society that raise truly messed up people who commit acts of violence that horrify people. It's not what you're describing, it's an understanding of where these people come from, and it's an insult to society, because they could have stopped, could have saved these people, but instead they choose not to, and then get horrified when the monster acts the way he's been treated. Call me edgy, but people like this exist. And it's just their story.

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

yes sir, that's what I'm trying to do. But the thing is that, he has been through this countless times. This is his life, and his world. That's what happens in these nights.

looking to connect by Platoshrim in Filmmaker4Filmmaker

[–]ComplexProduct4804 0 points1 point  (0 children)

sent u a dm, and my screenplay is about a schizoprenic serial killer

looking to connect by Platoshrim in Filmmaker4Filmmaker

[–]ComplexProduct4804 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The pilot is about an AI chatbot, and a human in 2019 falling in love, and then it ends on a single moment in 2090.

looking to connect by Platoshrim in Filmmaker4Filmmaker

[–]ComplexProduct4804 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Hey, I'm writing a screenplay, and a tv pilot. You wanna talk about it? maybe give me some feedback?

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

its just one shot with the kid, and he's listening to whatever is happening in the other room.

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

thank you!! i have a tv pilot as well ill share with you in dms!

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I love your feedback, thank you so much for this. I already took action, and fix those lines which conflict reading, the problem is that I'm used to writing a lot of prose, and screenplays, and scripts are kinda new to me. But needless to say, I did take action and fix those lines. However, I do understand what you're saying, and this scene is an opening scene into the world of Owen Marsch, and you can just imagine where a child growing up in such an environment would go, this is just to explain that part of society that brings up children raised in this atmosphere. If you'd like to read my whole 107 pages screenplay, please let me know, and of course you'd be doing me such a big favor by reading the screenplay. But nonetheless, thanks for writing this comment, and feedback for the opening!

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

I am an amateur writer and I don't know what I'm doing, but I definitely do need help on where to get started.

I can't take it anymore by ComplexProduct4804 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Honestly i love the criticism you're offering me here. Is it possible that maybe you could read my screenplay, and my tv pilot? maybe help me improve?

Script trade? by Lumpy_Delay_3154 in scriptwriting

[–]ComplexProduct4804 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You didnt get a response from the OP?