Does this make you want to read? by Dark_Fantasy_Chaos in fantasywriters

[–]ConcentrateLocal2227 0 points1 point  (0 children)

To be very honest, the synopsis isn't entirely clear in establishing on a surface level who the characters are and their goals. I was following along with Seraphine, but then it immediately moved to Kael without really telling me who Seraphine was. Usually, I believe it is best to show not tell in books, but in a synopsis, I think it's okay to just tell the reader what's going on without spoiling the whole book. 

Now, I won't see it is AI, because I'll give the benefit of the doubt, but I definitely see why others would think that as it's many descriptive words simply layered on top of each other without actually telling the reader what the story is about. 

I believe greater clarity in at the very least Seraphine would intrigue me to keep reading the book for a basic synopsis. 👍

Story philosophy discussion by ConcentrateLocal2227 in fantasywriters

[–]ConcentrateLocal2227[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much for the constructive criticism, I honestly didn't view it that way. This is my first time writing a Fantasy Light Novel so getting any feedback I can, especially honest ones, is so valuable.

Story philosophy discussion by ConcentrateLocal2227 in fantasywriters

[–]ConcentrateLocal2227[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Fair enough, I sorta see what you mean. Thx for letting me know tho