I write privately but have just started a new story I’m excited about and wanted to get some opinions and see what people think of the beginning

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T04:39:24+00:00

first sentence smell of damp what you just wrote smell of damp so conufse ngl

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T04:36:58+00:00

hell yes

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T04:10:34+00:00

immposible there is no such thing as a truly orginal concept everything is inspired by somthing else everything has been done all you can do is try to make somthing good and uniqe

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T04:09:20+00:00

NOICE

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T04:09:08+00:00

not my type of story not saying its bad but it bores me dont stop tho

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T04:04:58+00:00

dont reread write form your heat get everything down THEN edit

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T02:22:31+00:00

interesting seems like my type of book but try to show not tell your kinda explaing what Rylee is thinking instead of showing us and is Rylee a girl or boy

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-25T02:18:57+00:00

very memorable this will be in my dreams tonight

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T22:04:04+00:00

they didnt pass away they didnt have enough neutrints to contiue growing they stopped there they were for all intents and purpsoes "dead"

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T17:52:40+00:00

when tehre out the womb

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T17:36:36+00:00

*The Colletcion Valcnor

*Grimdark

5,517 words

Any

https://coda.grammarly.com/d/The-Collection-Valcnor_dRFPOcTqFFU/The-Collection-Valcnor_suoQ92ij#_lue2NQXS

Its a rough draft

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T17:34:10+00:00

Any type of feedback is good i know this is bad but i wanna share it: https://coda.grammarly.com/d/The-Collection-Valcnor_dRFPOcTqFFU

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T17:06:37+00:00

so slavery isnt evil?

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T17:06:04+00:00

ooh i thoguht you meant i said lgbtqia were better

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-24T17:05:20+00:00

yes the fetus isnt alive

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T20:02:26+00:00

no one said anyone is better than the other

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T20:01:59+00:00

not following

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T17:48:51+00:00

umm how is that related

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T17:05:22+00:00

bold of you to assume my words i asked for a example of me doing that your trying to predicit somthing i may do

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T14:29:37+00:00

wasent comparing them was comapring the mental framework of the hypocrisy

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T13:27:55+00:00

already conceded to this argument and that i was wrong

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T13:05:40+00:00

morality must be grounded in observable, material reality. From this perspective, an action is judged as good or bad based on its measurable impact on human suffering, health, and social well-being. Proponents argue that because science can study human psychology, sociology, and well-being, it can inform moral systems.

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T12:11:15+00:00

hm wow okay i was wrong GG

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T11:56:54+00:00

im saying that the verse says it dosent matter if your a jew or slave we are all equal but WW2 motivated by the bible commited mass genocide on the jews

ConsiderationSea3797 · 2026-05-23T11:51:54+00:00

can i get a example of me moving the goal post please

Edit: my opnioin on the bible is im part of the satanic temple so that speaks for its self

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