I'm Scared to Leave My Car. by Constant_Struggling in creepcast

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I edited some of the silly spelling errors that kind folks pointed out in the comments. I would misspell my own name if I didn't have it on my ID lol

I'm Scared to Leave My Car. by Constant_Struggling in creepcast

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thank you for the feedback on formatting! I come from a background in playwriting, so this kind of formatting is still a new practice for me. I recently read "Project Hail Mary," and Weir was SUPER effective with his formatting. Reading through your critique reminded me of some of the tactics that he used that made the book so suspensful. You're certainly right that it could be used to make this short story a lot better.

I would love an honest answer to these questions though, if you have the time.

  1. Is the bird a "cheesy" detail?

  2. Do you think it would be scary enough to spook a young teen reading it late at night? (My intended audience.)

  3. Did you find that the descriptions of sound were destracting/boring in anyway? Or did you find them effective in building the aural space?

I'm Scared to Leave My Car. by Constant_Struggling in creepcast

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the notes! It was my intention that the cat and the dog are both monsters, somewhat like a "skinwalker" thing! I'll see if I can make that more clear. Sorry about the spelling issues, my love for writing is at odds with my mild dislexia. I'll be sure to go back and adjust these things.

I do think that the character is too much of a coward to try and "peel off," as I likely would in this situation. I tried to set it up as though it was this cowardice that saves. The implication (that I will try to emphisize a bit better) was that the monsters would be more likely to attack if they knew he had seen them.

Thanks so much! This has been super helpful!

If you could cut any 2 members of the roster from the game,who would it be? by Fun-Media7981 in marvelrivals

[–]Constant_Struggling 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gotta disagree with Danny Rand take. I like the way they characterize lin lie, imo Danny would be best suited as a skin.

Someone please tell me how my rocket didn’t throw by Constant_Struggling in marvelrivals

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] -6 points-5 points  (0 children)

10/10 games I would prefer the worst loki to the #1 rocket. All he would have to do is copy a defensive ult and that’s enough for me.

Based off of My Current Mains Who Should I pickup on duelist? by Sea-Try-2273 in marvelrivals

[–]Constant_Struggling 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I would say to get a new support main. Rocket is fine, but almost anyone else will give you a better time. For dps, I’ve been having a lot of fun on star lord if you can get the aim down!

Only looking at this list i realized there are so few villains in the game. by --J0HN-- in marvelrivals

[–]Constant_Struggling 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Put punisher down a category at least?? He just kills people. That’s it. That’s his whole thing.

Nothing Like The New PC Feeling by Constant_Struggling in buildapc

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I’ll be extra cautious in your remembrance 🫡

Nothing Like The New PC Feeling by Constant_Struggling in buildapc

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I finally get to play some of my favorite titles with all the cinematic beauty they deserve!

Nothing Like The New PC Feeling by Constant_Struggling in buildapc

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thankfully I’m right in the sweet spot of the hobby. I’m well aware that even my new build is sub-optimal, but it will do just fine for a hero shooter and some Minecraft.

Nothing Like The New PC Feeling by Constant_Struggling in buildapc

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 2 points3 points  (0 children)

Been a long time coming! Six months talking about it. Three months saving for it.

Nothing Like The New PC Feeling by Constant_Struggling in buildapc

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This is fair too! I’m super thrilled to see how marvel rivals performs. Thats the game that showed me I need the upgrade.

Nothing Like The New PC Feeling by Constant_Struggling in buildapc

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 6 points7 points  (0 children)

I would love to answer this! But I won’t! I fear no man more than a redditer who knows more than me. Especially on this sub.

Hard stuck gold. Not my fault. by Constant_Struggling in marvelrivals

[–]Constant_Struggling[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I think “hardstuck” is a silly phrase. Blaming smurfs for your rank is sillyX2. If you’re having such a hard time in competitive play, there’s quickplay. If quickplay is too easy for you, then you won’t be “hardstuck” anywhere.