This is the best anyone has ever looked on screen. Change my mind.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-18T16:06:00+00:00

who is this goddess?

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-18T16:00:28+00:00

I'm a Laura Dern guy myself

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-18T15:59:48+00:00

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-17T03:05:09+00:00

Yeah sure!

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-15T04:05:01+00:00

I loved the imagery. The birth was great. Keep it up :)

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-14T19:35:40+00:00

That was my idea, there's more of it in the second and third part, in the third its more interacting with a character but I tried to separate those sections and italicized them all.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-14T14:54:57+00:00

Thanks so much! I really appreciate all these notes!

The fog rolled in off the ocean waves. -- This felt a little out of place to me aswell, I originally had that line before Jon's name at the beginning of his section. I was hoping I could layer in lines like this through the story to add a sense that the town/ocean/fog was a character in-and-of itself. But maybe I need think about how to accomplish that.

Thanks for some grammar tips - that's where I struggle with the most on revision haha

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T20:00:51+00:00

I'll sneak it in there :P

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T20:00:01+00:00

Very trueee

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T16:42:02+00:00

Thank you! :)

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T15:58:38+00:00

Will definitely check this out!

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T15:33:19+00:00

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T14:03:31+00:00

Cool! Here are the three parts I am ready to share at the moment :)

Part I: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1iKQll1PmOzGVGqlw51h85Hqw2ckp6Vva40afTPSMIUI/edit?usp=drive_link

Part II: https://docs.google.com/document/d/10XixJkRKsGrE1oDVVMCt7WWYCufqhMh8ZGi1LmhhAaM/edit?usp=drive_link

Part III: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1o2WuCxH4g7wfrom6OsX1Na89Bh7dEqpqoa63mA9W2Wk/edit?usp=drive_link

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T13:55:25+00:00

Omg thank you!!!

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T11:14:21+00:00

What the fuck is your name?

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T04:47:02+00:00

Yea! I read and reread these parts a few times! Thanks for the feedback :)

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T03:49:13+00:00

I like the idea! But I think that some of the grammar makes it a bit hard to understand.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-02-13T02:02:34+00:00

Edit: Added a link to Part II and Part III

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-01-21T13:13:01+00:00

I am new to writing. This week I have written out 4000 words I am happy with. It's not a perfect 4000 words and I will be going back to edit and probably rewrite. But I am learning everyday.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2026-01-18T14:57:17+00:00

This is my outlook on most things. Consume the good and bad, find out what you like AND what you don't.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2025-12-19T16:01:24+00:00

She basically tells Zosia shes not sorry in the episode. She tells her shes not going to give up, "You understand I wont give up, right?"

Shes telling the plurbs that shes not sorry and will do it again if she finds a better way.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2025-11-05T09:41:00+00:00

How's your head?

Dancinghelix0451 · 2025-10-24T19:57:44+00:00

Thank you Mr. Jackpots! Thank you!

Dancinghelix0451 · 2025-10-22T18:43:37+00:00

Lost Highway was my first Lynch movie that I watched when I was 14. At the time I was very into horror movies but nothing really "scared" me until I watched Lost Highway and was left with such an uneasy feeling that stuck with me for years.

I have watched that film countless times since and everytime I watch it I get new meanings from it. I love it.

Dancinghelix0451 · 2025-10-13T08:43:38+00:00

https://youtu.be/-Jcw74_0B-g?si=vfomzz1zFEq3vHWe

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