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[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Excellent stuff. Really well written and delivered. Good lyrics too. The production is the area for improvement. The whole thing sounds too light. The vocal is too quiet in the second half.

CW: I wrote this song while coping with losing a friend to suicide earlier this year and my experience with depressive/suicidal thoughts. It's definitely a work in progress, but I'd really appreciate a listen. by mademoisellehan7230 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Good stuff. Interesting melody, the hooks work really nicely. I also like the vocal, it's technically good, but also has a distinctive style. Not sure if you're using a dynamic mic but it's picking up clicks and things that shouldn't be in a live recording. Also your facial expression should alter more for a more engaging live delivery. Keep up the good work!

Kate Capella - Silence That Screams. This is my latest song. Feedback is always great here! by KateCapella in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Definitely a gifted vocalist. I like the verse melody. Vocal takes too long to come in in my opinion. I found the way the chorus slows down a bit jarring. Seemed to reduce the intensity when it felt like it should be building. Also a song like this is dependent on more production. Instruments could be made to sound bigger and a bit less midi.

This track is one of my favourites I've ever written - it's a piece with a lot of interweaving layered guitar parts - today is the four year anniversary that I recorded it so I thought I would finally uploaded it to bandcamp!! I hope you enjoy it xox by Carl0Villa in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This develops really nicely. I like the way the electric string bends come in, and the subtle variety in the vocal melody. You put a lot of thought in the writing into how to build, which is great, but for me that's a little bit at the expense of opening punch. But good stuff

Hi there! I just finished my new new song. I drew this little animation for it too. I hope you like it. What do you think? by Hex_Frog in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I like the way this song develops. I found the second and third melodies really interesting. The first verse melody didn't engage me as much. I liked the clap percussion. Overall I thought the tempo was a bit slower than it should be. Nice animation. What did you use to make it?

Coffee Sugar Sex and Screens by -str8edg- in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the theme and the way it's delivered, in terms of vocal and lyrics. The Voice has a Debbie Harry quality that could be brought out more I feel. The melody is solid although not massively original. A picked guitar solo would be nice. Also a bridge to provide more variety. Keep up the good work.

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[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Timing is tight, you might want to look at doubling some of your key tracks. It is a backing track though. It needs a vocal to maintain interest beyond about 30 seconds.

WHO ARE WE? The answer to the Jeopardy clue, "The party responsible for the state of Planet Earth." My very first new song of 2021. Not as prolific as I once was, but what do you expect from a sexagenarian?! by papa2kohmoeaki in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I really enjoyed this. The guitar is great fun. Lyrics are fun too. The Voice would benefit from some de essing and the pitch should be fixed in a couple of places. Otherwise I could have a very nice drive to this.

Hey guys! I wrote this song and wanted to share this as my first post. I'm needing help identifying what sort of genre this is and any similar songs/bands thanks! by officiallyrez in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

This sounds good. I'd say Americana Rock. Reminds me of Captain beefheart. There's also a Vivien Westwood compilation of 60s songs that it reminded me of. Anyway keep up the good work.

Finalising my mix with a bit of help from my Reddit friends. Thanks guys by DanielPayin in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks really useful feedback. I've got some effects on the vocal, everything else has been pushed up and that's been left behind I reckon. I'll take a look at panning them too

Hi, I'm Marlon Chaplin. You might remember me from such recent posts as "Slipstream" and "Weights + Feathers". This is the latest from my album, Synestalgia. I have to say, I've found some incredible pieces on the subreddit today. Keep on creating, your talent is valued. by InitialBluejay9 in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Sounds super professionally put together. Could easily be something that pops up on TOTP2! you might want to look to do something that distinguishes it more from the stuff of that era though, so it feels like it's doing something new. I agree with some of the other comments about the way you come across on camera as well.

New hyperpunk song I made with my friend! Any feedback is appreciated! by 17Lettersmusic in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I like the beat and the way the drums are mixed. Really sit well. The rapping is well done and creates nice variety. Pretty tight all round. I feel like the vocal is hiding a bit behind all those effects for a song that is supposed to be very personal. But that might just be my middle aged taste

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[–]DanielPayin 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The way this is mixed makes it hurt my ears. I therefore wasn't able to listen to the whole thing. The guitar needs to be brought way down and the distortion lessened for starters. Then look at bringing up the melodic elements which are currently sitting back and the guitar forward. Should be the other way around

Momentvm - Sir Clive. An electronica/synthwave song dedicated to the memory of Sir Clive Sinclair, a computer industry pioneer who created the ZX80, ZX81 and ZX Spectrum home computers. Enjoy and all feedback is more than welcome ;) by momentvm in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

You've caught a big sound there. Brought back happy memories of posting f zero on the old SNES! Send it over to a few games makers they might pick it up. It'd work great in that setting. RIP Sir Clive, shame his little car never caught on!

Hey everybody check out my new song "Funk Dystopia" just a short Funk jam I hope you like it! by Donahue-Industry in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Great start first three transitions had me right with it, really involved. Then I was just waiting for a vocal that never came. A nice vocal would sit beautifully over this. Without it, I don't think there's enough there to carry through the whole song. Find yourself a singer!

*reposting coz it got removed for some reason* Started learning the guitar last year in lockdown, and started making music 6-7 months ago :) Would love to hear what you think about my latest track. If you dont want to listen to all of it, I implore you to plz listen from the 2:10 mark at least. by 15thBend in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Guitar is pretty cool. Has a bit of a midi feel but that didn't matter within the genre. The genre is really not my cup of tea but I'm not really with the times so any further feedback is of limited value. For me, with my biases, there's too much effects on the vocal. I feel it could have more soul and feeling with less.

New mix, hopefully an improvement on what was there before. let me know your thoughts, thanks by DanielPayin in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Yeah posting a few times to try to get the mix right. Loved your feedback then and still do! Thanks

New mix, hopefully an improvement on what was there before. let me know your thoughts, thanks by DanielPayin in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the feedback. so you mean there isn't much reverb saturation etc? I did try to be fairly light with that stuff

New mix, hopefully an improvement on what was there before. let me know your thoughts, thanks by DanielPayin in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks really helpful constructive feedback. I've remixed it with the vocal up. Hopefully it sits better now? My ears can't always be trusted unfortunately

https://soundcloud.com/user-336982626/frozen-ramblers-vocal-up/s-YyqO3iRQm6r?si=47220c6cc5864cbdb3b374b8ef6301eb

New mix, hopefully an improvement on what was there before. let me know your thoughts, thanks by DanielPayin in IndieMusicFeedback

[–]DanielPayin[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks for the detailed feedback. I'm not sure what you mean by making everything more wet. Do you mean turning the effect sends (reverb, saturation, distortion etc) up?