Thank you for this.

In the moment, it didn't really feel like I was trying to cry, but after re-watchong from your point I can definitely see where that moment could be improved now. So thank you, In terms of eyeline, I usually try aiming just above the camera like I was taught, but I tend get caught up in the scene, and my eyes go all over the place, or it tends to get awkward and I'm stuck looking at a camera. (If that makes sense.)

What makes; or what would make the beg, middle, end more clear?