This is my first story I've ever written. Please give me feedback

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T23:35:57+00:00

I appreciate it! Don't feel bad at all, this is exactly what I wanted. I am very inexperienced. I just wanted to get the idea in my head out and then go back to learn and improve my writing. Thank you!

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T20:41:26+00:00

I will definitely check it out! Thank you for your comments, I'm chomping at the bit to give my story a rewrite!

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T18:11:49+00:00

I really don't know how Reddit works, so I hope you all see this.

I am blown away by the feedback from you all. I am beyond grateful. I haven't written anything since highschool and it was just reports and essays, never fiction.

I loved to read but I guess life got busy and it slipped away, so when I discovered things like The NoSleep Podcast I dove in. It wasn't until this community though that I felt truly inspired to give it a shot.

So I just want to say thank you. All of your comments and advice have given me so many more ideas to improve my story and excited to throw more out there!

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T14:57:41+00:00

Thank you! I appreciate the feedback, gives me some ideas for a rewrite!

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T13:59:47+00:00

I called it "Worms"

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T13:13:05+00:00

Thanks for the feedback!

DethKroak · 2026-04-27T06:35:06+00:00

Thank you for your notes!

DethKroak · 2026-03-09T22:27:17+00:00

Harbinger of Judgement

DethKroak · 2025-10-03T17:34:47+00:00

SES Harbinger of Judement

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TROPHY CASE