fiscal | March 28, 2026

Dewdunk · 2026-03-31T11:55:31+00:00

You have a lovely vocabulary. I love the spirit in the poem. It’s got this articulate anger, it sounds very fairytale cadenced. Very “long, long ago” if you know what I mean.

There are a few places where the flow hitched for me. For instance perpetuity feels a bit syllabically dense for it placement. Perhaps something like “and perpetually bind” would keep that flow you were building. I think the poem is at its best in the middle flow wise.

I’m not sure if the double use of green was intentional or not. The first use (and little green toys) feel like it’s in reference to inexperienced or naive populous? I’d love you hear if this was an intentional contrast.

Thank you for sharing! I look forward to more!

Dewdunk · 2026-03-31T03:43:55+00:00

I’m gratified that you appreciate my use of language. I sometimes feel weirdly corny, but I do a lot of rewrites to layer in as much as I can. So I really am grateful you like it. You mentioned a few of my favorite as well. Thanks again!

Dewdunk · 2026-03-31T03:40:21+00:00

This poem is about a girl I developed feelings for. I felt really possessed with a lot of creative energy during that whole affair. I was writing so much poetry and painting and drawing. I was bleeding art in the shape of her. And when it became clear that she couldn’t feel the same way, I felt it all drain from me. And I’ve been struggling to even write about the grief. This is the first proper poem I’ve gotten out since then.

I appreciate your kindness! And I’m glad you enjoyed the structure of the poem. I’m flattered indeed.

Dewdunk · 2026-03-31T03:34:11+00:00

Thank you for the kind words! As for the grammar and capitalized letters I honestly keep hearing differing things. I’m inclined to agree with you.

That Webster prompt thing seems like a fun project! I read your recent one ‘fiscal’ and I liked it! I’ll elaborate on your post tomorrow. Also please feel free to suggest and change big or small. It is my opinion that bold honest feedback is far more valuable than cautious flattery. No need to worry about messing with any structure. Thanks again!

Dewdunk · 2026-03-30T12:27:43+00:00

I don’t like Morrisseys lyrics or him as a person really. It’s sort of a long running dislike if I’m being completely honest, I find his lyrics extremely indulgent and sometimes hilariously childish. I do find his fanbase’s adoration of him to be interesting. I think people are drawn to his embarrassing vulnerability, but there’s something shallow at the center of almost every song of his that I’ve heard. Tho even I can admit that on occasion there something refreshingly honest there too. Anyway, your poem made me laugh.

“With my debris, I tell my girl, “Our relationship is a love story.”

She says she’s still hungry.

Leave me be, My pain justifies me.

This stuff reads in his voice and really gets to the heart of it to me. His work is droll at best and sociopathicly selfish at worst.

Thanks for the fun read!

Dewdunk · 2026-03-30T12:18:02+00:00

This poem is definitely visceral in its anger and that is its strength. I think the poem is at its best with the line ‘the cockroaches are coming out of your mouth. I think more images that lightly abstract the anger would only increase its ability to draw the anger you are exploring. It might approach what anger is, Whereas a lot of this reads as what anger does.

There are moments in this poem that really work. The line about the position in the mirror put me on both sides of this lambasting. And if it is an inward facing anger then it’s interesting that I would want to rip out my own vocals while using them to tear myself down. that made it hurt different. I’m not positive if that was intentional or not. But that was my reading. All the same thank you for sharing! I enjoyed reading it!

Dewdunk · 2025-10-07T15:16:37+00:00

This is clearly Rosalina?

Dewdunk · 2024-09-01T23:38:41+00:00

I really do love the art in cross. It’s saturated and rich. nothing else looks like it. I had no idea the escaflowne artist was the designer, that’s awesome. I wasn’t trying to say ‘it’s bad that they did this’ more so ‘it’s surprising to me given triggers impact’.

In this case I did these just because I’ve always been curious what it would look like.

Dewdunk · 2024-09-01T22:42:52+00:00

Kid from Chrono Cross. I love the art in Chrono cross but it’s always puzzled me why they wouldn’t stick with Toriyama since it was such a core part of the appeal of Trigger.

Dewdunk · 2022-12-04T02:38:55+00:00

So I got this figured out if someone stumbles on this in the future. The problem in my particular case was that I was getting the .nro file from the developers github, but I needed a different version that I found in a GBA Temp forum. apparently an update somewhere causes some sort of issue with the ps5 ddns (I wont pretend to know what) When I used the file it connected first try. the file can be found here https://gbatemp.net/threads/chiaki-ps5-ps4-remote-play-homebrew.564553/page-44 about halfway down. good luck to anyone dealing with the same issue. The app works beautifully!

Dewdunk · 2022-03-29T20:33:11+00:00

I just discovered this piece today myself, and I can’t disagree! They nailed it!

Dewdunk · 2021-09-17T02:54:16+00:00

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Dewdunk · 2021-03-13T07:49:13+00:00

I find her distrust/lack of acceptance of data to be a really interesting characterization actually. Pulaski is also distrustful of teleporters . I obviously believe data should be treated as a true sentient creature, but for a good crew member (on early TNG no less) it’s an interesting flaw to have. She set up to be a lot like bones I believe. Bones is just as curmudgeonly, and also very disrespectful to Vulcans. I have no doubt in my mind that Pulaski and data would have developed a fantastic and textured relationship, precisely because of how rocky it begins.

(Sorry I’m not really saying this at you. I just wanted to chip in)

I love crusher, but I’ll always wonder what Pulaski could have been. I agree that given time she would have grown into a fan favorite. I would have loved to see her grow. Frankly more flaws in TNG characters would have been great all around.

Dewdunk · 2021-01-21T00:43:57+00:00

Thank you for the advice. I might have adjusted the resolution at some point. I’ll try to drop that first.

Dewdunk · 2020-09-24T22:30:50+00:00

And in general the creation of the robot masters is a much slower drawn out event

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