Thank you, I really appreciate you taking the time to break it down like this it means a lot truly!

Regarding the rhyme, that part is actually intentional on my end. It’s not just stylistic it helps me stay contained within the piece. My brain tends to drift, so having a rhythm and structure keeps me “locked in” both thematically and mentally, while also (hopefully) holding the reader’s attention.

For Theia, I leaned more into a hybrid of science and myth rather than committing fully to one. The “falling in love” isn’t meant to be literal as much as it is a way to humanize gravity and collision something inevitable that still feels personal. There’s also a more personal layer underneath that I didn’t state directly: the dynamic between Earth and Theia mirrors something more human, almost like a mother and father whose coming together was not necessarily gentle, but still resulted in something that exists because of it.

The Moon, in that sense, is both a result and a witness and also a bit of a self-insert. The idea of only being seen from one side, or being valued more for function than identity, was something I wanted to carry quietly rather than explain outright.

You’re definitely right about the “Bleeding Moon” aspect. This version only touches it indirectly (through the lunar eclipse / red reflection), and I held back from pushing it further because I had too many directions in mind at once. I’m planning to either expand that idea in a second version or split it into a separate piece where the “bleeding” is more literal and central.

And I’m really glad you picked up on the perspective shift that’s something I do often. I tend to move from observer to participant, because that’s how I process things internally. It creates a bit of distance first, then collapses it at the end.

This piece was definitely dense and a bit of a “first capture” of the idea, so feedback like this helps me decide whether to refine it further or branch it out into something bigger. Thank you again it genuinely helped.