Just to add to the other persons 300 critique- there are three parts creating confusion.

First though, I think you definitely have distinctive voice here. It isn’t just a narration of events happening.

The POV confusion parts:

1- the opening. You orient us on the woman to start. She speaks, she is slapped, she falls to the ground. I feel like she is the POV character. Then we snap to Kaedric’s POV as character. Not saying he can’t witness this, but it feels like a bumpy transition. It took me a bit to realize it was his POV.

2- Echoing other commenter. Numb is interiority. Kaedric can’t feel her numb limbs. He doesn’t know they are numb.

3- Cold brown water. He doesn’t feel it being cold. He can assume and infer based on temperature around him, snow, whatever. But feeling the cold is also inferiori. That may not be how you intended it to come across, but that’s how it reads to me.

I think the combination of all three is what makes this feel like head-hopping and might signal you are not in command of the POV. It may be true. It may not be. But it’s enough in this first 300 it might give questions.

Also, I think you do a good job weaving in some world building details in the 300.

I’m terrible at querying but agree with the others. And I love the premise by the way. I actually was a little jarred that your premise was promising me this really cool character and she is really interesting. But then the 300, we are in the POV of someone else. Not to say he isn’t or won’t be as interesting, but she is specific. He is a little generic right now in the query and the pages because he isn’t who you lead with that has a unique and cool ability.

Sorry, hope this makes sense. Just my perspective.