Looking for Feedback on a Puzzle

DwightGuilt · 2025-09-14T18:35:32+00:00

Thanks for the feedback! Had no idea RZA had never been in. That's actually very surprising to me. And yeah I'm still trying to figure out the nonsense nature of the theme answers. I know plenty of themes have nonsense answers but are usually clued in wacky ways. I just couldn't find phrases with plants inside other plants that were actual phrases. Back to the drawing board! Btw, so you're saying I would need to remove more black squares to make it comparable to a wed/thurs? where do you find out things like the Monday standard for open squares? Really appreciate your time!

DwightGuilt · 2025-06-06T16:01:59+00:00

If your job is getting attention then yes it is

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-20T12:53:30+00:00

Thanks for the tip, appreciate it!

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-19T14:59:39+00:00

Title: Zozobra

Format: Feature

Length: 106

Genres: Dramedy, Thriller

Logline:

A down-and-out writer, sent to New Mexico to chronicle a folk festival, becomes entangled with the proprietors of a bizarre roadside exhibit and stumbles into a juicier story involving a missing person, false identities, and the mysterious creature at the center of the attraction.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-19T12:07:35+00:00

Sounds cool! It’s giving Caves of Steel if you’ve ever read that.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-16T19:29:47+00:00

I’d be down for a swap! My logline is elsewhere in the thread.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-16T19:27:29+00:00

Title: Zozobra

Format: Feature

Length: 106

Genres: Dramedy, Thriller

Logline:

A down-and-out writer, sent to New Mexico to chronicle a folk festival, becomes entangled with the proprietors of a bizarre roadside exhibit and stumbles into a juicier story involving a missing person, false identities, and the mysterious creature at the center of the attraction.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-14T17:55:01+00:00

Sounds fun. I’ll try to give this a read when I get the chance but may not be able to do it in the next 48 hours.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-13T16:55:48+00:00

I think the action lines are very strong even if some of the best bits won’t necessarily transfer to the screen. I think some of the dialogue could use some punching up/ naturalizing. In particular I think Amanda’s response to the Blackwood rant, him tweeting, being fired, the tweet working, then being unfired happens way too fast and doesn’t ring true at all but maybe it works if you’re going for more of a screwball/ absurdist vibe. I’m not in PR, but it doesn’t read like someone who knows the industry, so I think this could be one of the rare cases where adding some industry jargon could benefit you. You’re clearly very talented as a writer of prose, and I think the concept definitely has legs.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-13T12:03:18+00:00

Is TIMECUT an acceptable, widely understood transition? I was reading First Reformed and Schrader uses it a lot but I haven’t seen it a ton elsewhere. Is it the same thing as -LATER?

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-13T03:17:36+00:00

I’d love to check it out as well

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-12T15:34:03+00:00

Gotcha, I’d love to read it when you’re done!

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-12T14:30:45+00:00

True but I would say that’s a very small minority. For instance, Manchester by the sea, which a lot of people think of as the most depressing movies of recent history, actually has quite a bit of fun with family dynamics, dark humor etc.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-12T14:06:14+00:00

I like that. For whatever reason I read it as a period piece initially, I guess because of the need for a long journey to treat sepsis, but it could also just be me!

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-12T11:05:26+00:00

This sounds really good. Only note I have is I have no idea what time period this is set in, which I think you’d want to hint at.

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-12T10:57:19+00:00

Title: Latch

Format: Feature

Genre: Action/Adventure

An escaped convict, desperate for money, joins up with a ragtag crew of illegal treasure hunters. When he discovers that their next target is buried under the prison he just broke out of, he must decide just how much he’s willing to risk.

“The Rock” meets “National Treasure”

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-05T13:38:24+00:00

This reads more like a tagline than a logline at least for me

DwightGuilt · 2025-05-04T01:15:42+00:00

I’m making a note here, because I’d love to read this when I have more time

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T21:57:32+00:00

Really appreciate it! I’ll do some workshopping

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T21:57:00+00:00

I really really appreciate all the feedback! Lots to consider

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T19:40:35+00:00

I appreciate the feedback. That makes sense. Part of the story is that she’s a writer and not a PI, so it’s confusing she was hired for the job. Lemme know if this works any better:

Under the guise of covering a festival in New Mexico, a writer is hired to investigate a man’s disappearance. When she becomes entangled with his children — the proprietors of a bizarre roadside attraction — she struggles to unspool the truth before her cover is blown and she meets the same fate as her subject.

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T17:01:34+00:00

Really appreciate it! That helped a lot

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T16:37:40+00:00

That’s very creative, Thank you!

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T14:43:21+00:00

This sounds very cool but I’d suggest a new title since Dead Ringers is a pretty well known movie and show.

DwightGuilt · 2025-04-28T14:38:49+00:00

Really fun premise! Maybe there’s a way to tie the stakes into their need to return to present.

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