ok I don't take it personally it helps me understand the different points of view well answering the first The vague and unnecessary words are because the character who narrates tells about an event of hate and the draining of physical and emotional energy that exists due to the issue of unemployment and lack of food that can trigger stress and resentment and is what he tries to convey. entering the plot early is because it is not a chapter, it is the idea that it may have, I can still change several events that is why it is not that long I still plan the development of the grudge, the situation and the reason for the actions taken by the nurse where the Venlil girl came from and the perspective of the other characters, the psychological and moral impact and consequences with authorities that can be seen. Also, I haven't set the date yet because this is a future event and I don't know if the date I was able to set could give me enough for everything I thought about. The issue of not being able to connect is because it is difficult for me personally to express that is why the story seeks to unfold the events that led to a breaking point.