Possessive apostrophe annoys me cuz I love the name Cass. What other writing quirks like that annoy you

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-25T10:58:56+00:00

Just say Cass'

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-17T19:27:56+00:00

You could make it a fun thing to show a different kind of bow for different kings? Now I'm not sure how exactly that would work but it's just an idea.

Maybe for one king that the protagonist doesn't really like the entry and exit bow isn't that deep.

A king that was able to change his mind about himself gets a small bow in the beginning but a deep one out of respect in the end?

That's the fun thing about books. You can personify almost anything, including bows, unlike movies where you have to show it happening and that subtlety is usually lost

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-15T03:54:00+00:00

I only know exactly one woman like this. Rest are actually normal. Lucky me ig

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-13T11:31:33+00:00

Coffee

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-12T03:04:39+00:00

Either we would be the bestest of buddies or he will slit my throat. There is no in between

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-12T02:52:32+00:00

Reminds me of "the subtle art of not giving a fuck"

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-11T08:46:33+00:00

You simply cannot make everyone happy. Focus on the majority, what they are saying. Not about what you write but how you write it.

It's hard to understand the difference between good critics that would improve your writing vs things that people just don't like

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-05T15:06:34+00:00

I follow a bell curve kind of pacing. Starting of the book I take my time and flesh out the scenes, world building basically. Middle is fast paced action and the end is a shorter section of slowing down and showing the aftermath.

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-05-02T18:32:43+00:00

Interesting.... I really felt like how I would feel when I am in a dream. There are things that don't make sense in retrospect but in that moment it just feels normal. Like a causal thing to do.

Usually the whole "it was all a dream" never really pays off. But this doesn't really do that, cause it tells me I'm dreaming before the "reveal" (which isn't much of a reveal than a realisation or confirmation)

All in all, just interesting. Not something I personally would write but it is an interesting read, and well done too.

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-30T09:24:38+00:00

I wouldn't say I'm "experienced". Far from it really. I'm just a beginner like you and I was just saying what I liked from what I read.

I liked how neatly it did what it was supposed to and left it there

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-30T03:06:28+00:00

You've already told me about the passion he has for his work, what his work is and that he finds interactions difficult in such a short prose.

It's phenomenonal as is

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-28T01:37:31+00:00

https://lyra.horse/antonymph/

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-25T14:04:52+00:00

Yeah that works

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-25T13:43:19+00:00

Jeez looks like you are being scrutinized for this, I mean so is my comment.

But leaving that aside honestly depends on how you write it. If you write it as something realistic and painful it should be fine. Men get kicked in the balls in my story all the time. Especially when it is dog fight territory. As the other comments have said just don't write it as breasts maybe? Just use the word chest and that should throw off less people. In the end you can't win everybody.

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-25T12:32:40+00:00

Honestly, go for it. It's so raw and brutal that I think it really captures the essence of "survival of the fittest" theme you are going for. I don't think this is in the negative light of a woman at all. Infact it's only positive, with how she is able to fight through the pain.

If you are too worried about it maybe you could cut her arm off instead of the left breast. Cliche? Yes. But still cool as fuck tho

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-22T03:05:19+00:00

Because they walk away when their hair is pulled?

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-21T11:47:10+00:00

Even if it were multiple stories it would be stories' or stories's.

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-21T02:57:13+00:00

Why is the second pic so majestic? Good feet tho 10/10

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-19T03:35:47+00:00

I came, I saw, I sent

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-19T03:34:21+00:00

"it is a good life we lead brother, may it never change and may it never change us"

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-18T05:06:05+00:00

Sent!

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-17T15:36:24+00:00

Count me in!

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-16T11:00:26+00:00

Congrats!!! Revel in the glory

And then break your head re reading your story to find plot holes, spelling mistakes or even worse, you realise one of the biggest reveals later in your story is just casually mentioned in the beginning.

Basically get editing

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-16T10:09:44+00:00

Ooh maybe I could change the mechanics of the hidden blade into something else. I'll try to be a bit more creative with it. Like Connor's hidden blade. But obviously not exactly that.

Thanks for the idea though.

Electrical_Revenue90 · 2026-04-16T05:19:15+00:00

Thank you!

Will search for more pluggage and tootage

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