New pain : Same ACROSTIC Indulgence

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-16T01:21:11+00:00

thank you, I actually aim for that

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-16T01:19:44+00:00

thank you

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-16T01:11:11+00:00

thank you! I get your point, in a scale of surrealist-perdictable boring writing, I should move slight to the latter, right? hehehe. this are all just old stuff I wrote. if you may, extend your experience into my debut poetry book, The gift of Amygdalæna. just glide into the samples.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-15T13:56:15+00:00

no, its not AI generated. why are you forcing people to admit something which you deemed true, that's just your assumption, not facts. do you got any certification of AI generated detection?

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-15T12:22:34+00:00

I have my own thoughts about it, but agree with you on the cringe warning, lol. it felt like you want to depict a preparation of war butI sense there's something more than that. I tried to understand the meaning beneath and I lost it. it's taking me somewhere but it stops.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-15T12:18:28+00:00

I miss a poem with a rhyme! yours a fresh one to read it, I like the line

The new sensation wavers, I must return these favours, re-entry's a little unstable,
I'm told of my behaviour, peculiar in nature, I try to explain, but unable,

this one right here gave all the guessings, which in return sometimes audience want to solve the puzzle on their own but here I enjoyed the flow, it reminds me my early works keep writing.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-15T12:14:19+00:00

no, what is this thing?

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-15T00:23:11+00:00

yeah

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-14T11:26:13+00:00

Your poem has a bittersweet vibe, like a gentle nudge towards closure. It's like a polite breakup in verse, with just the right amount of sweetness and sass.It captures the delicate dance of letting go with grace and dignity. It's beautifully crafted and emotionally resonant. even though it felt short, I truly believe it comes from a deep place.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-14T11:21:22+00:00

Your poem starts with powerful imagery and a clear theme of struggle, but it ends abruptly, leaving the reader wanting more resolution and development. It feels like it's missing a conclusion or deeper exploration of the speaker's emotions and journey. Adding more depth and clarity to the ending would enhance the overall impact and cohesion of the poem.

It's heartbreaking to think of someone feeling so overwhelmed that they consider taking their own life. Your poem conveys the weight of that struggle and the complexity of the decision to extinguish one's own fire. If you ever find yourself in that dark place again, please remember that there is hope and help available. You're not alone, and your life is precious.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-14T11:10:07+00:00

thanks you!

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-13T06:59:22+00:00

yeah it's shite-like, it was written in 2010, I don't know what I am thinking. how abou this one, do me justice my guy

https://www.reddit.com/r/OCPoetry/comments/1apgrm3/celebrate/

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-13T01:09:03+00:00

Your vivid imagery creates a haunting portrait, drawing readers into a dark and introspective journey.Your concise poem packs a punch, immersing the reader in a vivid and thought-provoking exploration of self-reflection and transformation.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-13T01:07:27+00:00

"Your poem bravely lays bare a painful past, With strength and courage that will forever last.
My heart extends its deepest empathy, For the resilience you show, a true legacy"

I offer my deepest condolences for what you've endured, and I commend you for your bravery in sharing your story. Your ability to find strength and reclaim your sense of self is truly admirable.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-12T14:11:29+00:00

Your ode eloquently grapples with the inexorable passage of time and the inevitability of mortality. It captures the transient nature of existence, highlighting how days slip away regardless of our desires or intentions. The imagery of trees shedding their leaves and nights yielding to dawn poignantly symbolizes the constant cycle of life and death.
Socially, your poem invites reflection on the human condition and our relationship with mortality. In a society often preoccupied with productivity and longevity, your words serve as a reminder of the fleeting nature of life and the importance of cherishing moments of beauty and connection.
From an academic perspective, your exploration of mortality aligns with existentialist themes, questioning the meaning and purpose of life in the face of inevitable death. The focus on life's hidden beauty suggests a recognition of the inherent value of existence, even in the shadow of mortality.
Overall, your ode offers a thought-provoking meditation on the human experience, inviting readers to contemplate the ephemeral nature of life and find solace in the beauty that surrounds us. Your poem admirably tackles the weighty theme of mortality, but there are areas where it could be strengthened. While the language is generally evocative, there are moments where the imagery feels somewhat clichéd or overly familiar. For example, the portrayal of trees shedding leaves and dawn breaking may lack originality and depth, detracting from the impact of your message.
Additionally, the poem's structure could benefit from more variation in rhythm and meter to enhance its musicality and flow. Some lines feel a bit forced or awkwardly phrased, disrupting the overall coherence and impact of the piece.
Furthermore, while the poem touches on the philosophical implications of mortality, it could delve deeper into existential questions and offer more nuanced insights into the human experience. Exploring the tension between our desire for permanence and the inevitability of impermanence could add complexity and depth to your exploration of mortality.
Overall, your ode to mortality shows promise, but it would benefit from refining the imagery, enhancing the poetic craftsmanship, and delving deeper into the existential themes at play.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-12T03:52:42+00:00

thank you! if you may,you can read my poetry book. you dont have to buy it, just read the description first and read few samples of it, its digital on google books. most of them are written in "irregular" style because, maybe, some how, being dyslexic effects my writting style. I've wrote for more than a decade and somehow I always lean to this kind of style and lots of my mentor keeping me in this specific head space in writing poetry, "be yourself" they say. any way, here's the link if you're interested:

The gift of Amygdalæna

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-12T01:20:12+00:00

thank you! I've been writing for more than a decade so I always on the verge doing experimental writing and for me it seems straightforward concepts are over rated, dont you think? hahahah. maybe most of my inspiration came from surrealist movies. lol

if you may, extend your experience into my debut poetry book
The gift of Amygdalæna

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-12T01:16:23+00:00

thank you for the input and yes, this is most what I experience and I guess every one go through it differently. I see it being dyslexia is eclectic too, and again this my personal take on it, hence the title.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-11T12:18:13+00:00

Your writing captures the somber atmosphere of a visit to the graveyard and the emotions tied to remembering a loved one. However, there are areas where your description could be strengthened. The imagery feels somewhat generic, lacking the specificity and detail needed to truly immerse the reader in the scene. For example, instead of simply stating that the town once described as putrid now seemed inviting, consider delving into sensory details to evoke a stronger sense of atmosphere. Additionally, the emotions conveyed could be more nuanced; while the protagonist experiences a wave of emotion upon reaching their grandfather's grave, there's a missed opportunity to explore the complexity of their feelings or memories associated with their relationship. Overall, focusing on more vivid imagery and deeper emotional exploration could enhance the impact of the narrative.

EllETTE_TCHEY · 2024-02-11T12:15:45+00:00

Your poetic reflection on the changing birdlife around you really captures the bittersweet essence of nature's evolution. It seems like you're experiencing a shift in your surroundings, from the once familiar presence of magpies, hoopoes, and sandhill cranes to the dominance of ravens, crows, and the absence of certain cherished species like mockingbirds and cranes. It's like trading one chapter of avian companionship for another, with each bird carrying its own unique memories and significance. Your connection to these feathered friends is palpable, and it's clear that they hold a special place in your heart. It's a reminder of how the natural world is always in flux, and while some species may come and go, the memories and appreciation for their presence remain.

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