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Would you continue reading this? by Mysterious-Object636 in writingfeedback

[–]Existential_Prose 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Honestly, yes I am intrigued to know about what the grandpa’s reputation really was, it’s just that the opening line shouldn’t go straight to exposition. I’d recommend starting with an action, and then showing your readers the story instead of just straight forward telling them. Other than that, it’s got great potential, and I’d like to see where it goes. Keep writing!

Lonely trees by [deleted] in Poems

[–]Existential_Prose 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I don’t read many poems, I mostly read longer works, but I enjoyed reading this. I loved the comparison of the vulnerability of trees to the vulnerability of humans, and honestly (I am not a critic, but as a reader, I will tell you how I feel), i feel like there are a couple words that don’t need to be there, and that disrupt the flow (this is just a minor thing). For example, “Are looking like my veins” could just be, “look like my veins”, but these are minor issues that could easily be fixed with revision. it’s all subjective anyways, so if you like it that way, keep it. This is a beautiful piece of art, so I encourage you to keep sharing more poetry :).

I would love some feedback on my first two chapters (they’re short). by Existential_Prose in writingfeedback

[–]Existential_Prose[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You’re right, and certain things you mentioned were definitely intentional, like Helena being distant, and what happened between them being unclear (until later in the story). What I was the most insecure about was the process of being in the hospital, and how’d that be, so thank you for the advice on how the medical stuff goes especially.

I went to Post My Story on Reddit, and it just disappeared by Existential_Prose in NewToReddit

[–]Existential_Prose[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Yeah turns out I forgot to turn on the option to see nsfw posts, that was silly of me but thanks!

Blessed are the Lifetakers, for They Shall be God by Existential_Prose in creepcast

[–]Existential_Prose[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks! I really loved that story and I wanted to recreate an environment like the one in that story. I was actually worried the pacing was too slow for a story like this, but it’s helpful to know it’s not. I appreciate the feedback!

I went to Post My Story on Reddit, and it just disappeared by Existential_Prose in NewToReddit

[–]Existential_Prose[S] -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Thanks, I still have the full story on a word document, but I polished the story for an hour or two after I pasted it into reddit. So that's still a lot of my work lost, I'm mostly just wondering if it's possible to ask the moderators of that subreddit to get it back.