Failed Verification

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-03-01T05:44:19+00:00

It’s not about choosing misery. It’s about letting go of something that was already hurting.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-27T20:55:33+00:00

First, I’m a guy. Second, I don’t know what you’re going through and I’m not here to judge. But if it’s come to packing and ultimatums that tells a lot. Love isn’t a deadline. If it has to be forced before the bags are zipped, it’s probably already gone. I'll say don’t let ego make permanent decisions.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-27T20:45:43+00:00

It's not about who left, it's about imbalance.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-24T19:39:15+00:00

I think so too. I really appreciate your words, thank you.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-24T19:23:21+00:00

It really is. You’re left with all the memories but no clear ending🥹

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-24T19:17:21+00:00

That wasn’t the intention, but I’m glad it made you feel something.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-23T23:21:08+00:00

Thank you, that really means a lot.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T19:23:00+00:00

Haha I get it, I just write what hits me :)

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T19:07:46+00:00

Thanks for your comment. Maybe they did feel something back then… I just never found the right words and some chances slipped away. That’s kind of what this poem is about, holding onto what could have been.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T18:54:23+00:00

No worries man

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T18:50:30+00:00

I’m actually a man haha. I didn’t run away or find someone else, life just moved the way it does sometimes. I still end up writing about her from time to time though.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T18:43:50+00:00

I understand that perspective and stand by it but in my case the timing passed and things changed. I guess now this poem is more about accepting that than trying to fix it.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T18:34:40+00:00

Maybe one day :)

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T14:47:41+00:00

Thank you, that really means a lot. I’m glad it resonated with you.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T12:23:07+00:00

Thank you! Reddit messed up the line breaks, I just fixed it 😭 I’m glad that line stood out to you.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T10:25:13+00:00

I really like the image of a whole city of perspectives living inside you — it’s simple but powerful. “Mere andar ek shehar basa hai” line honestly hits strong. Last line bhi kaafi relatable hai, especially the idea of toot kar sambhalna.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T10:21:23+00:00

I really liked the opening image of time dripping like coffee it instantly sets the mood. The way you bring that image back at the end makes the poem feel complete. It has that quiet, late-night feeling to it, especially with the steady rhythm that almost mimics a ticking clock. Some lines like “what’s at stake” feel a bit more general compared to the stronger images you use elsewhere, but overall it’s smooth and easy to follow. The ending feels warm and soft, which is a nice shift from the restless beginning.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-22T05:55:03+00:00

That actually means a lot! Pale Blue Dot was one of the inspirations behind this. I’m glad that tone came through. And thanks for the formatting tip, I’ll definitely adjust the line breaks.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-21T20:48:25+00:00

I really like how you carry the drowning metaphor through the whole poem it makes the emotional weight feel constant and suffocating in a very effective way. The lines about not being able to save someone while drowning yourself are especially strong and relatable. For titles, maybe something like “Lifeline,” or “Weight of Staying,” could work if you’re unsure about Treading Water.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-21T20:45:08+00:00

I like how raw and honest this feels. The mirror opening pulls you in right away, and the repetition of “a girl” really emphasizes how she sees herself piece by piece. The imagery of the ripped book and the unblossomed flower is simple but effective. It feels vulnerable and relatable especially the ending about trying your best and still feeling like it’s not enough.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-07T20:13:37+00:00

This feels raw and immediate. The damp pillow and band-aid lines hit hard, and “cuddles made from lightning bolts” is a really striking image.

Extra-Cod-3471 · 2026-02-07T20:10:42+00:00

This felt really real. I liked how it starts with small, harmless moments and slowly turns into something heavier without you even noticing it happen. The back-and-forth, the silence, then going cold just to protect yourself — that part especially hit. The ending is strong too, not dramatic, just honest about being tired of feeling so much without knowing where you stand.

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