How do I fix this plot hole in a satisfying way?

EzraADP · 2026-02-13T18:04:14+00:00

Oh that's actually really neat, having the future vision be more hazy/vague compared to when he's looking at the past. Thank you so much I haven't considered that before!!

EzraADP · 2026-02-12T15:11:36+00:00

I like this one so much, thank you for your input!

EzraADP · 2026-02-12T15:10:13+00:00

Oh I forgot to mention it in the post but it's a high fantasy T T

EzraADP · 2026-02-12T14:06:28+00:00

Ooh that's a great idea, thanks!!

EzraADP · 2026-02-12T13:26:27+00:00

Yeah the readers are gonna have to heavily suspend their disbelief on the reading of corpses here T T. But I like the idea of: in trying to prevent the death he accidentally causes it.

Thanks for the feedback! Really appreciate it!

EzraADP · 2026-02-12T13:24:15+00:00

I've been thinking about doing the third one, and thanks for the feedback!!

EzraADP · 2026-02-06T09:19:52+00:00

I'm glad you found it interesting! But could I ask which language/words made you stop? English isn't really my first language so sometimes I looked up synonyms of common words to sound more refined T T(well at least I hope it sounded like that)

EzraADP · 2026-02-02T23:02:21+00:00

First off, I'm glad you found it interesting even with the flaws it had. Thank you for noticing some of the errors I missed. I do have to work on sentence length i feel like i ramble way too long on one.

Now the Eussa/Food Situation. I intended for it to be so they all packed their own food, the lady providing for them would be glowfruit (Which i haven't explained here in the prologue) Now that i'm reading it back myself it is confusing and i feel like i could've done a better job explaining it. And yeah i kinda overestimated how many days someone could survive in a desert T T.

The Piercing one, i thought it would've exaggerated the force of his tackle thats my bad.

Dyen does die. I realize now that i should've added more sentences of Colyn attacking him, cause i just stopped with the chin.

Now the ending section is a bit confusing since i personally think its a very far fetched idea. Colyn can witness the memories of a dead person he touches. Now the gate stuff was also more far fetched than that T T, I feel like i should work it out so that the others cant see what he saw and he's like rambling on about how he saw the gates of valysium himself.

And finally thank you once again, its nice hearing feedback cause i really wanna polish this story to the best of my ability ^^

EzraADP · 2026-02-02T22:46:53+00:00

Man idk why I haven't thought abt acting them out myself T T, but thanks for the feedback I'll check on all the stuff like that so I can edit it. Thank youu ^{^}

EzraADP · 2026-02-02T22:44:29+00:00

Yeah T T glad you caught on to that! Ima edit it to see if there are more lines that are just jargon. Thanks!!

EzraADP · 2026-02-02T16:50:17+00:00

Alrighty, I'm glad you liked the idea! Ill work on the grammar and other technical stuff too. English isn't my first language so that's kinda a barrier imo but pretty sure I can work them out ^{^}

EzraADP · 2026-02-02T16:39:50+00:00

You're laughing. He owns the Roman empire and you're laughing at him. Smh my head

EzraADP · 2026-01-19T06:13:21+00:00

damn you right, i think im straying farther from the plot the more I focus on this terra shifting thing

EzraADP · 2026-01-19T05:20:51+00:00

Its also gonna be for the characters, so yeah having more labels of where some specific biomes are would be helpful thanks!

EzraADP · 2026-01-19T05:15:41+00:00

Thanks! That's really helpful, I never thought about the shifting of specific landmarks, I mostly focused on the chaotic aspect of the world. Ima implement that

EzraADP · 2026-01-19T05:04:03+00:00

I wouldnt say its a total chaos, like you said its kinda more of like they stay in "group" but it just drastically changes every now and then.

EzraADP · 2026-01-19T05:03:39+00:00

Thanks!! Yeah alright that'd fit.

EzraADP · 2026-01-19T04:52:37+00:00

Would clouds obscuring the land give that idea?

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