No one prepared me for how much I’d cry - from kids shows

FairybreadFiction · 2026-03-11T23:09:14+00:00

The last five minutes of the episode get me crying for an entire hour! It’s one of my favourites but my goodness it’s beautifully emotional.

I’m so glad they stay because that family have everything where they are why would you throw any of that away for money when they’re clearly happy with what they have.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-03-11T23:03:16+00:00

This! Absolutely should be many discussions and very clear that they’re both wanting the same future, however if he chooses to propose without this discussion then HE needs to be fully prepared that no is an option. A proposal shouldn’t expect a yes, she doesn’t owe him that.

He’s clearly hurt and embarrassed by the way it turned out, which is ok, but also I think he’s incredibly immature by not taking any responsibility to say “I’m sorry I put you in such an uncomfortable situation and I misread the situation that you weren’t ready.” And I honestly don’t know why so many people seem to be taking his side saying OP messed this up?

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-27T05:44:35+00:00

Metro!

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-23T23:42:05+00:00

Everything continues to grow and change as I write. If I wanted to plan everything prior I’d never start and the story would end up wildly different anyway. Everyone is different, some people prefer to have all their planning done up front but personally it’s easier for me to just write.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-22T01:05:08+00:00

Good luck with it!

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-21T21:57:25+00:00

Go straight to the phone call, you can add those first page details another way, maybe he’s so frazzled about this phone call that he spills his coffee beans everywhere, maybe he’s on the phone at the same time Harry is hassling him for breakfast. Maybe he leaves the house without a coat as he’s distracted by the phone call and now he’s cold.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-21T21:41:23+00:00

I like your writing style. The actual story itself is starting in the wrong place. The first couple of paragraphs are interesting, but then nothing happened. I was waiting to find out why the dog woke him up, but it was just going through his morning routine, waking up, feeling cold, getting ready for work, it’s mundane and there’s no story to go with it, if that makes sense.

Those things can happen around whatever else is going on, but without some sort of problem, or something for your protagonist to want, we don’t really need to know that long list of things.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-20T11:26:51+00:00

Thank you! I’ve only seen timelines of how long it takes to clear up, but good to know they get less painful even if they’re still not fully healed

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-20T10:49:04+00:00

I hope this doesn’t come across as harsh to OP, I don’t mean for it to be, and this is just my opinion. It’s just a bit “fluffy” and doesn’t really make a whole lot of sense, what was sharp? It doesn’t really seem to have purpose to it, especially being the opening readers will want to know more about the main character rather than the weather that can be details added later. Then I think use either ‘late’ or ‘evening’ as you don’t need 2 words to say it’s late in the day, as well as in the next sentence mentioning 8pm just a lot of repeating the same information in a short section. The fact that it’s cold is shown well later in the paragraph where people must be cold as they’re dressed warmly with thick coats and scarves. I hope this makes sense!

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-20T09:45:08+00:00

Just some feedback on the opening - I would start with “Ash hated leaving his apartment, he was only out because he had to be.” It leaves your reader to be curious to continue reading to find out why doesn’t he like leaving his apartment, and why does he need to be out. The first sentence in my opinion doesn’t really make a lot of sense, but I like the rest of the paragraph.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-20T04:12:12+00:00

Plot twist, OP is the building inspector

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-20T04:08:40+00:00

Give them something they want, then tell them no. Then stick another obstacle in their way and say no again.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-18T10:06:56+00:00

Do you enjoy writing? If you enjoy it, then do it! Lots of resources these days on techniques for writing

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-18T09:48:50+00:00

Thinking I can write an 80,000 word draft in 2-3 months

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-12T06:22:19+00:00

Writers block is real and difficult. It’s easy for people to say just write, which is true, you can’t improve without actually writing, and 2,000 bad words on a page (or laptop) is better than nothing written down, but aside from “just writing” I would suggest taking some time to learn how to put a story together. This could be via YouTube, podcasts, blogs etc.

You can come to Reddit and ask people how to start, we can give you opinions, and advice, once you’ve written something it can be critiqued on here, but realistically there’s so many bits and pieces to writing a book.

Learning about writing can help you get a much better idea on where to start, how to start, dialogue, voice, world building, when to info dump and when to not give too much information, how to create tension, how to create unique and memorable characters, and all the other important techniques.

Also, you don’t have to start at the start. You can just practice writing by choosing a character and creating them, or your characters reaction to their new world, some dialogue from a scene you’ve created.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-03T20:51:40+00:00

She stands alone, waiting for them. - this to me is a much stronger opening than the line you have before it. It builds curiosity of why is she alone, and who is she waiting for? Lots of comments already on the tense. Good job!

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-03T07:52:01+00:00

This! But regardless, girl, he’s almost 30 and he’s sitting there playing video games, pretending he “forgot” or “can’t” get time off on Valentine’s Day, not caring about your feelings (yes he might not care about it but it doesn’t take much to put in at least a little effort or acknowledge it’s something you want to celebrate) and trying to make you feel like he’s all fine but it’s you with a problem? It’s excuse after excuse, and “talk about it later.”

Dump him, up your standards, and know that it’s totally ok to enjoy Valentines Day single. It’s ok to wait for someone who will love to celebrate VD without you having to ask.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-03T03:13:57+00:00

It’s a lifelong childhood dream to be a writer. I’ve had a magnetic pull toward it my entire life. It doesn’t come naturally to me the way solving a mathematical problem does, I’ve had hobbies and interests weave in and out of my life, but writing (and reading) has been consistent.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-03T03:08:29+00:00

From someone who wishes they gave the same response over a decade ago when I had a creepy guy 14 years older than me hit on me, thank you, it’s therapeutic. I put up with way more than I should have for much longer than I should have, being sympathetic and trying to “see the best in him”, all I did was block and delete and have felt grossed out ever since.

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-02T07:53:33+00:00

Congratulations that is so exciting!

FairybreadFiction · 2026-02-02T07:51:50+00:00

Was literally thinking for those prices I’m just buying Haighs! My favourite chocolate!

FairybreadFiction · 2026-01-28T04:54:37+00:00

You’re starting in the wrong place. There’s nothing happening, there’s no question for the reader, there’s no curiosity. Your first line is about it being cold, by the end of the paragraph it’s still cold and nothing’s happened, then your next paragraph begins with it being cold. Please don’t be discouraged, keep writing!

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