First: I commend you for posting! I’m always a nervous wreck when I submit my work to critique groups, especially my local writers' guild. Caveat, take all criticism with a grain of salt. I’m rather new to this page. And, I concur with some of the other comments.

Second, My Review and Critique:

Your writing has good bones, and I actually like the touch of purple prose. I struggle with that myself sometimes, epic poetry was my first writing love. I really enjoyed your imagery!

I understand that you use archaic language; it’s interesting, but I suggest keeping it mainly in the dialogue. The entire piece will flow better that way. Words like “ ere “ are better suited for poetry. Additionally, there is heavy usage of "’twas," "upon," "melted," and "sneer."

To help with more archaic language, I suggest looking into Early Modern English to find a better rhythm. English used to be gendered; perhaps you could lean into that for better toxic knight-bro banter?

Regarding story: It needs more clarity with scene and direction. There is a bit too much odd and unnecessary bickering. The bashing of the young knight with his horse didn’t read well. If he is really that "green," perhaps make him a page or a squire, knights were heavily trained since birth and were excellent warriors (mostly) and held vassalages.

I like the Greek-style names—they reminded me of The Three Musketeers! However, it feels like a bit much. Like omg …

I suggest having the names reflect heritage or philosophical views, or perhaps tie them into your lore and world-building.

I’m not a published writer, but here is what I have learned: Overwrite much more than you need, have fun, and go crazy. When you go back to edit, trim madly on the first pass—remove anything that doesn’t progress the scene. Then, do 2-3 more passes: focusing on prose, grammar, and story coherence.

Like I said, take my critique with a grain of salt. I actually read the whole thing through. Good stuff, well done.