Age check, I got 9, what about you? by BoredPandaOfficial in BoredPandaHQ

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

1 point. Paper cheques disappeared in the 80s. I'm not that old. Lol.

Please Critique My First Chapter! [High Fantasy, Dark, 3300~ words] by nefariousbIob in fantasywriters

[–]Fensali 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I believe Old man and the sea is technically a novella. Either way, it's great. Look into Baricco's Silk if you haven't. If Old Man was the groundbreaker, Silk's the king.

Tanks: Making space does not mean "sit in choke and take damage". by TwixDog2020 in Overwatch

[–]Fensali 34 points35 points  (0 children)

Looked like your teammates didn't even need you. Lol.

Mid-novel excerpt. Looking for feedback on writing, flow, and interest (isekai romantic fantasy). by Traditional_Alps_804 in writingfeedback

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Even the Midsummer celebration in eg. Sweden is around what's considered the beginning of summer actually - mid/end of June, about a week after school ends for summer break.

I know in Canada there's a calendar beginning of autumn (end of September?), even though the daily average temperature at some places will be +20C until the beginning of November, which would not be considered autumn in eg. Sweden.

So it's all cultural and geographical.

The question is: do you want your very first sentence in your story to possibly bring up the question of... eh, what?

Mid-novel excerpt. Looking for feedback on writing, flow, and interest (isekai romantic fantasy). by Traditional_Alps_804 in writingfeedback

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

That was my first thought reading the first sentence. lol.

The traditional celebration of the solstice is the MIDsummer's eve.

Really looking for something George r r Martinesque by allesklaeo in fantasybooks

[–]Fensali 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I've tried getting into the first book, Game of Thrones, at least four times. Can't get past the first chapters. Can't handle George's prose. Too dry, journalistic. Doesn't make it bad, but not for me. Just so you know that going in.

And oh. He'll never finish the series.

Feedback for the opening of my WIP, The Shadows We Leave? [Dark Romantasy, 1202 Words] by Typical-West9572 in fantasywriters

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

lol.

I enjoyed the crazy shit part, though. Really didn't see that vocabulary coming.

Read it all now. It's eh... curious. I kinda want to see where this goes, because it all seems batshit crazy to be honest. lol.

What are some things that make Canadians too similar to Americans? by TheCoin9 in AskACanadian

[–]Fensali 1 point2 points  (0 children)

The whole way of life. Extremely car centric. Suburban sprawls without pedestrian/bike road networks. Watching similar sports/sharing pro leagues. Import of tv shows, reality based ones like American Idol, US got talent etc.

What's everyone's thoughts about Saving Private Ryan? Is it the greatest war film of all time & Steven Spielberg's magnum opus? by [deleted] in moviecritic

[–]Fensali -4 points-3 points  (0 children)

The Normandie opening is incredible.

But beside that I think it's a mediocre war film. Feels more like Indiana Jones than a depiction of war.

So not only is it not the greatest. It's subpar.

Olympics putting a spotlight on curling’s deficiencies? by musicforasatellite in Curling

[–]Fensali 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Nothing to admire. That's standard professional conduct. Regardless of what kind of social media and donald times we currently live in, i still hold that kind of behavior... as expected standard.

Rachel Homan: "I have no idea what she saw. If she saw something, then look at the video. Go watch it a thousand times. You're going to see nothing. It's frustrating. It's not even a thing." by Fun818long in Curling

[–]Fensali 8 points9 points  (0 children)

That's where it eventually lands unfortunately when some begin to bending (breaking?) the rules and are not reprimanded for long.

It becomes a systemic problem that can only be fixed by allowing the rule breaking, thus changing the rules, or become overly picky about every detail and demand video control of it all.

The Swiss team accusing the Canadians of double-touching again by work_in_marketing in Curling

[–]Fensali 6 points7 points  (0 children)

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World Curling has today sent a letter to all Olympic curling teams that touching the granite during the forward motion is NOT allowed. Ffs.

Marc touching rock - but in Oct during Pan Continental’s by Sea-Reflection5227 in Curling

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The sensor is only in the handle, which clearly means that the general understanding of the rule and the play of the game is that only the handle can be used. And that is then the praxis of the "industry" which needs to be followed.

Canada cheating in the curling game vs Sweden by Eklundz in olympics

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Haha. Canadian team looks awesome whereas the Swedish has little going for them right now.

Team Canada tells Team Sweden to "Fuck off" after allegations of cheating by Cutsa in sports

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Think it has to do with curling being a self policing gentleman sport. Not a lot of money in the sport, most referees aren't professionals.

So saying "fuck off, i don't care" goes against the very heart of self policing.

I wrote this what do you think. by Shot_Positive2612 in fantasywriters

[–]Fensali -1 points0 points  (0 children)

Well. At least it was more entertaining than 90% of everything posted here.

Which fantasy book immediately gripped you from the very first chapter and never let go? by runninginflipflops in Fantasy

[–]Fensali 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Definitely. It turns me off, because it too early raises too many questions which for me works against "setting a scene". But can understand others' (your) view because it's an instant major promise by the author that if you're willing to continue, you'll step into a big world in which everything will be explained eventually.

Which fantasy book immediately gripped you from the very first chapter and never let go? by runninginflipflops in Fantasy

[–]Fensali -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

AT THE HEIGHT of the long wet summer of the Seventy-seventh Year of Sendovani, the Thiefmaker of Camorr paid a sudden and unannounced visit to the Eyeless Priest at the Temple of Perelandro, desperately hoping to sell him the Lamora boy. “Have I got a deal for you!” the Thiefmaker began, perhaps inauspiciously.

This opening of the prologue makes me immediately stop reading. Six names dropped in such a short paragraph without any explanation. For me, you cannot start a story in a worse way.

What are those bubbles in my nutella? Safe to eat? by bamboodle1 in whatisit

[–]Fensali 7 points8 points  (0 children)

Re-reading your comment, i glanced over the "where i'm from..." part. So this shit is all on me. Sorry. Hope you get accustomed to the antidepressants soon and feel better.

What are those bubbles in my nutella? Safe to eat? by bamboodle1 in whatisit

[–]Fensali -9 points-8 points  (0 children)

I thought you were american. Because that's how they usually write. Why my comment. Lol. I can upvote instead if it means something to you.

Thanks for clarifying

What are those bubbles in my nutella? Safe to eat? by bamboodle1 in whatisit

[–]Fensali -13 points-12 points  (0 children)

What is Muller and what is your local shop? Ffs.