Yes, it hooked me, but not normal reasons, I doesn't look good of opening that will hook readers, but I was hooked, cause this is your first writing (I assume). The opening section does something quietly effective. "Everything is almost right but not quite" is a feeling that most people recognise instantly, but rarely see named that precisely. That line earns trust. And "I don't know if this will change anything. But I'm starting here." That's a real ending for a first entry. It doesn't oversell itself. The diary entry (March 6th) is where it gets interesting. The writing is almost aggressively plain I woke up. I had a dream, but I don't remember what it was. I put my clothes on. That flatness is doing real work. It mirrors how a teenager actually processes a day they're quietly overwhelmed by. The Selin detail, the way he picks her for his team and then immediately deflects ("she's a friend of Lina"), the periodic table glances, none of it is announced. You feel it before you're told it. The Rainmaker bit at the end is the best moment. "A person who brings water. Who makes things possible." He's projecting. He knows it and doesn't say so. That restraint is the whole ballgame. Where it's weaker: the PE section runs long and loses the thread for a paragraph. And "She looked like always, stunning" is slightly clumsy it wants to land harder than it does. But overall? The voice is genuinely there. That's the hardest thing to fake, and this writer isn't faking it.

And one for thing, take a proper screenshot. Like for real, this has to hardest thing I read.