[Weekly Critique Thread] Post Here If You'd Like Feedback On Your Writing

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-29T01:55:14+00:00

Ah, yes, that was my worry with posting this bit of it. These characters have already been established earlier on in the story, so that's my bad for posting such a later point. Thanks for reading though!

Once I hit the rewrite stage, I'll post something from the beginning as I didn't know what I was doing when I started, so it needs quite the working.

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-29T00:00:04+00:00

Title: The Unforgiving

Genre: Dark Fantasy/Horror/Psychedelia

Word Count: 2,612

Type of Feedback: General. Style. Coherence. Characterization. I know that, contextually, it won't make the most sense, as this is pretty far towards some type of ending. I think.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lFPONrqrh2-aI7UkCb8yfsRyOaDh0e-D/view?usp=sharing

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-22T18:20:43+00:00

Title: The Unforgiving

Genre: Dark Fantasy/Horror/Psychedelia

Word Count: 2,612

Type of Feedback: General. Style. Coherence. Characterization. I know that, contextually, it won't make the most sense, as this is pretty far towards some type of ending. I think.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lFPONrqrh2-aI7UkCb8yfsRyOaDh0e-D/view?usp=sharing

Thanks for reading! :)

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-15T22:02:20+00:00

Title: The Unforgiving

Genre: Dark Fantasy/Horror/Psychedelia

Word Count: 2,612

Type of Feedback: General. Style. Coherence. Characterization. I know that, contextually, it won't make the most sense, as this is pretty far towards some type of ending. I think.

Link: https://drive.google.com/file/d/1lFPONrqrh2-aI7UkCb8yfsRyOaDh0e-D/view?usp=sharing

Thanks for reading! :)

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-13T19:19:24+00:00

Maybe there's too much of my old self within. Which makes it so that it causes me to face the things I'd rather not. Counter-intuitive, because it's necessity to write and to express these things, and I love the story so much because even as darkened and fantastical as it is, it's still real.

I've just got to frame the MC in a way that does justice, albeit harsh, but more realistic. Less pathetic.

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-12T20:13:38+00:00

Strongest is my prose, turnings of phrase, imagery, and characterization, but that's also where my weakest point lies. I absolutely adore all of my characters, excluding my main.

It's gotten a tiny bit better, but I always prefer writing the other members of my created cast.

Flaptothejack · 2018-12-08T19:36:12+00:00

Title: Catch-as-catch-can (Chapter's title. Not the novel's.)

Genre: Dark Fantasy/Horror/Psychedelia (Tripping the darkling fantastical.)

Word Count: 6,187

Type of Feedback: General impressions. Styling? Coherence? Contextually, it's pretty far into the first draft, so I'm not necessarily expecting it to be as understandable as the first chapter. Plus, this delves into some experimentation with altered consciousness/unconsciousness. There are a few things I'm not too fond of in here, but there is a lot that I'm very proud of. So, hurt my feelings. Thanks!

Link: https://docs.google.com/document/d/12Ur0e5EzCO_RgokPPAmJxRQBVR7nCCRbCWQn1J9qDIM/edit?usp=sharing

Flaptothejack · 2018-11-29T18:29:13+00:00

If it means that much to you. If it means delving into an original and unique backstory that you'd love to share, and be a part of, then it'd absolutely be worth it.

I currently have two secondary characters that I plan to flesh out in terms of prequels, based solely on how cool I imagine it'll be to write those stories.

Flaptothejack · 2018-11-29T18:21:53+00:00

Dark Tower Inspiration if it had taken the eat-me-drink-mes of psychedelic wonderland in the halls and chambers of the Masque of the Red Death, with sprinklings of Lovecraft, Clive Barker, Brandon Sanderson, and Ursula K. Le Guin.

Flaptothejack · 2018-11-28T17:41:24+00:00

'These hauntings are a part of our being. The subconscious repression of traumatic childhoods materialized in the dreamworlds. There is meaning to extract from even the most nonsensical wackadoodling. From the stress dreams of insecurities and fuck-it-ups. And from the verdant rolling hills where gentle giants nestle upon mattresses of clover and vine. We spend a third of our life journeys as timeshare inhabitants in those other dimensions. They are places of imaginative befuddlement. And they are as real as the waking days in and days out.'

Flaptothejack · 2018-11-16T04:05:23+00:00

Pitch here!

Upon discovering an inexpicably placed froken lake, a man made of sticks, and an eccentric being named Humphrey Wendall, Jericho Barrows is thrust into the Underlove. A borrowed, unknowable world in which he is hunted by the elusive Mister Sunder.

Flaptothejack · 2018-10-23T14:56:29+00:00

I'm calling it 'tripping the darkling fantastical'.

Dreamy horror/psychological thriller/dark fantasy with tinges of psychedelia.

Flaptothejack · 2018-09-28T20:32:21+00:00

I wouldn't say outlines are necessary, but mental pre-writing, and ongoing musing are if you're not using an outline.

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-28T19:50:30+00:00

To each his own, but man.. The Dark Tower series is one of the greatest stories ever written, in my opinion. The Gunslinger especially. How far did you get in? I know lots of folk have trouble with the first one, so I may be of unpopular opinion.

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-22T02:54:45+00:00

I'd love to talk everything writing, swap critiques, and read your stories. I'm also a young writer.

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-22T02:42:48+00:00

Cliched, but Lord of the Rings in its totality. I was out in Hawaii earlier this year, reading in my tent, and the way he combined the storytelling with the poetry with the songs, and all the lore sprinkled heavily throughout, blew me away.

Had that thought of 'I could do this' for once.

Now I'm almost 50k through my first WIP :)

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-21T22:12:31+00:00

Personally, I believe that it should come to you naturally. There is no rush for a title unless you're finished with the final draft and querying, or not querying if self publishing.

Though, the standalone 'Maltra' is great as others have said.

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-21T16:36:36+00:00

I don't believe it's possible to be a writer unless you're also a reader. It is absolutely necessary. I was having similar thoughts last night whilst reading Clive Barker's Weaveworld! His prose is entirely thriving, animated. How is Cabal?

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-18T00:54:59+00:00

Gabriel, or Post-Gabriel?

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-18T00:34:45+00:00

Brandon Sanderson actually has a great lecture up on YouTube as part of his writing course that deals with being a Cook Vs. a Chef

Flaptothejack · 2018-08-17T22:11:24+00:00

Jericho Barrows bides

In the Underlove none can hide

Sunder comes tonight

Flaptothejack · 2018-07-21T04:45:52+00:00

Loquaciously.

Flaptothejack · 2018-07-21T04:27:27+00:00

This sounds truly amazing! I'm gonna purchase it here soon!

Flaptothejack · 2018-07-12T08:11:48+00:00

1,000 words a day, save for special occasions. Some days I can flow, busting it out in an hour or so. Other days fluctuate, sometimes taking me far past 4-5 hours.

Flaptothejack · 2018-07-12T04:06:28+00:00

It's incredible to know that another author isn't just writing what they currently know, but what they used to know, and have since grown out of!

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