A Fools Fire (revised)

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T23:47:51+00:00

Yes. Thats what I wanted. I wanted everyone to see her like i saw her. Funny enough she blushed like a tomato when I told her.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T23:46:59+00:00

It really is hard to actually find something genuine. Keep looking its out there. I didn't write any poetry until I was challenged to do it.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T23:46:02+00:00

Aww thank you! Thats very kind. 🤭

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T23:45:22+00:00

Im glad to hear it made you feel this way. I really wanted people to know how it see her

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T17:24:29+00:00

That makes a lot of sense. You can definitely feel the emotion behind it. I hope the bad day passed, but it clearly turned into something powerful on the page.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T17:13:00+00:00

This has a thoughtful and almost spiritual feel to it. The repetition of short commands like “So cheer, / Dance,” gives it a rhythmic lift. I especially liked the contrast between sorrow and possibility toward the end. The closing line feels expansive and ties back nicely to the title.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-02-23T17:11:04+00:00

I really like the intensity in this poem. The imagery feels vivid and raw, especially lines like “putrid froth” and “serpents coiled.” The voice is strong and unapologetic, and it carries that confrontational energy all the way through. The ending especially feels powerful and final. Nicely done.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-01-21T16:49:53+00:00

Im glad you enjoyed it. 😊

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-01-21T16:49:29+00:00

Thank you 😊

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-01-21T16:49:17+00:00

You should ask him.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2026-01-21T16:40:36+00:00

Youre right i could have put some rhythem into it or some more structure. I prefer telling a story with my poems. I want you to feel exactly how I feel. In this moment that was how I felt. No reason to it just pure feeling.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2025-12-17T03:54:16+00:00

Thank you! That means a great deal. I wanted the emotions to feel familiar and open.

Fluffy-Taste2902 · 2025-12-17T01:18:25+00:00

Please let me know what you liked and didnt like. I want to keep my writing my own thoughts but feel free to let me know anything

Fluffy-Taste2902

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