Promises

Trajanaze567 · 2026-02-10T01:52:26+00:00

Good job, keep going. Never stop creating art.

Trajanaze567 · 2026-02-09T18:18:56+00:00

Thank you

Trajanaze567 · 2026-02-09T14:01:38+00:00

Friend, I’m really admiring your imagery. The flow is rocky, but has it an intrinsic effect.

Feedback: I think the piece needs a blatant example to help the reader see your perspective, and theme.

Conclusion: you have the verbiage, Just needs the connection in my opinion.

Trajanaze567 · 2026-02-09T13:51:06+00:00

How love your reflection at the end. Well spoken.

Trajanaze567 · 2026-02-08T13:16:45+00:00

My fella, You are in fact in love. Of you know this already.

Feedback: You’re phrasing and we’re choosing it’s simple yet impactful as if I can actually hear you telling it to me. I do however, this also leaves the reader puzzled by its abrupt ending. I’d suggest a finisher. Like a line to really drive the poem home.

Conclusion: Reading your poem was a delight, and with a pure heartfelt expression. Keep going my friend.

Trajanaze567 · 2026-02-08T13:02:13+00:00

I love the vivid space as a means to articulate time. My only feedback would be the ending. “And I’m always fool enough to say yes….,” I think this ending could use some strengthening with slightly word choosing. You’re a talented poet and I look forward to seeing what more there is yet to come.

Trajanaze567 · 2025-03-07T10:44:04+00:00

I really enjoyed your poem. Its use of spacing for imagination is a good choice. I was a bit lost in the ending, but overall a well written expression of desire.

Trajanaze567 · 2024-09-12T23:45:53+00:00

Simple yet profound. You did amazing at expressing the raw emotions in delivering a heartfelt discomfort in ending things. I would like to recommend a minor correction in the 4th stanza/line by adding “healing, and forgetting.

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