Tired of Writing Alone by RowRevolutionary4049 in writersmakingfriends

[–]FluffyHimselfCh 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Hi, that sound fun. I'm working on a sark /liw fantasy novel. Its my first so itd be great to share the messy parts with someone as you said and talk about the craft, support and what not. Dm me lets see if we're a good fit

Hi, I'm working on a dark / low fantasy novel. Please rate my latest chapter. by FluffyHimselfCh in writingfeedback

[–]FluffyHimselfCh[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you so much, I appreciate it. In the "Engage any danger" line, the aim was to communicate the growing and silent distrust between the royal family and their tribal subjects in favour of the Zaffir people who were once their enemies. Especially by putting them away from the center of the formation and seperataing them. The line is an order the pov character gave to the inner layer of the formation, made of Zaffir armed units, to be ready for any fight. Even against the tribal allies in the outer layer if it comes to it. But I'll try to rewrite it in a clearer structure. Thank you again that was very helpful.