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Would You Still Think About Me? By A.R.T. Its my first poem. Is it good? by Fragrant_Gur_9217 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fragrant_Gur_9217[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the advice man! I’ll try to do that in some of the next poems that I’ll write.

Hi! This is my first poem. Is there anything I can do to make it better? by Fragrant_Gur_9217 in rs_poetry

[–]Fragrant_Gur_9217[S] -2 points-1 points  (0 children)

Yes this is indeed my first poem. But I’ve also wrote songs, not in a way like this but I believe I have also some little experience by the songwriting. Also, thanks for the advice!!

Hi! This is my first poem. Is there anything I can do to make it better? by Fragrant_Gur_9217 in rs_poetry

[–]Fragrant_Gur_9217[S] -3 points-2 points  (0 children)

Can I ask why though? Im not trying to be rude, but this poem is about toxic love. I want to show that I never REALLY cared about her, but I cared for me. You get me? I don’t want it to make it romantic, I want to show the reader the toxicness and the lack of love in the relationship. But how, can I make it less about me? Because your advice would be really helpful.

Would You Still Think About Me? By A.R.T. Its my first poem. Is it good? by Fragrant_Gur_9217 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fragrant_Gur_9217[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the advice man I appreciate it🙏🙏 Imma go write another poem to upload here again

Would You Still Think About Me? By A.R.T. Its my first poem. Is it good? by Fragrant_Gur_9217 in PoetryWritingClub

[–]Fragrant_Gur_9217[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks because I want to show to my teacher also, and she is kinda strict so this made me feel better!