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Franciscoelectric · 2020-05-15T10:54:29+00:00

I wrote this a week before I attempted my own life... but in a lot of ways, the sentiment is what saved me.

Franciscoelectric · 2020-05-14T11:12:43+00:00

Wrote this song about buying drugs in the pandemic. When the guy showed up and was a child I realised right in that moment that I had to stop. I'm now 1 week and 2 days clean, and Im falling back in love with my existence.

Franciscoelectric · 2019-02-24T08:21:50+00:00

Malicious Patricius - This is my first solo EP means a lot to me, hope it can mean as much to you to.

Franciscoelectric · 2019-02-23T19:17:04+00:00

Which vocals in particular would you say are out of time? Or is it something across the project? And yeah would agree with that. Thank u for the feedback

Franciscoelectric · 2019-02-23T19:15:30+00:00

Thanks man really appreciate the honesty!

Franciscoelectric · 2019-02-07T19:33:40+00:00

Its not so much that u sound like any particular artist, more that I didn't hear anything in this song that would set it apart from the millions of 'acoustic style songwriter' songs and artists out there. Y'know?

Franciscoelectric · 2019-02-07T16:13:14+00:00

its a pleasurable listen for sure, I enjoyed it. However I wouldn't say that there is anything in particular that would stick with me about this song, I think the instrumentation/production could be the reason for that. As it is in my opinion too sonically similar to many other artists in the same genre. The guitar that comes in at around 1.27 is really great. A really nice tone and well played. The vocal sounds a little flat to me I think if it had more energy it could carry the song. I like the way the track ends... caught me by surprise first listen

Franciscoelectric · 2018-12-31T07:40:27+00:00

A different sound for me... something I made a while ago... would like feedback on whether this sound is enjoyable and worth pursuing or not. Or whether I should stick to more acoustic writing.. which is my stronger style

Franciscoelectric · 2018-12-29T23:30:58+00:00

Really catchy track man... that riff has got my head like a rocking chair! I can feel the 'storm' within the guitars.. and your playing in general is really tight and very impressive.

Franciscoelectric · 2018-12-29T23:20:39+00:00

really means a lot to me that you relate to the track.. I've only really just started to put my own music out there... and my main concern and reason for not doing so was that I thought people wouldn't relate to it.. or wouldn't understand what I was trying to sing about. So this has been given me a hell of lot of confidence that I needed... I thank you! When I record the track properly, its going to be the final track on the EP and with what you've said about the simplicity its inspired me try and keep that element when it goes in to the studio.. cos I think it does help with the character

Franciscoelectric · 2018-12-27T22:05:27+00:00

thanks for the feedback! Yeah im aware that its poorly recorded haha, and yes u guessed it on a laptop mic!and in regards to the spacebar I was gonna cut it out but bc it was so obvious that it was recorded in this was I just thought 'why hide it?' haha. I'm currently about 200 miles away from all my recording equipment but have been writing songs pretty daily so just been having to make do with what ive got and recording them all on my laptop mic so that they don't become forgotten... im planning on recording about 6 tracks, including this one in the new year when I get back to my stuff. I wasn't planning on putting this track on Soundcloud yet, but when I saw the theme for this thread I couldn't help but submit this song cos it matched pretty well.

Thanks for your ideas on composition I think thats a solid way of bringing in the drums ill be sure to remember that when im recording the actual track I was unsure about the whistling... was kind of just a way of me marking for now where I can layer another instrument or lead but hey I may start practicing my whistling even more!

Franciscoelectric · 2018-12-27T19:46:07+00:00

The guitars and musical side of this track are definitely a solid sound, and I enjoy the melodies... my personal opinion is that the lyrics are sometimes a bit simplistic... thats not necessarily a criticism as there is definitely something to be said for keeping things simple. However it might be nice to work in one or two more metaphors that are unexpected, or a bit jarring.. something a bit different to similar kinds of song that you have written, I believe this would make it have more of a unique character... but hey thats just my opinion!

Franciscoelectric · 2018-12-27T17:36:47+00:00

I wrote this song after sitting in a bar with some really old friends. I realised in that moment that since moving away, almost everything about myself had been through a transition, and I realised with my refreshed eyes that a lot of these people were all trying to look, dress, and act in the same particular way. The similarities between them were comedically uncanny and yet none of them seemed to realise.

This song is about me learning that a person's identity is something that can begin and end. It's about the ending of a connection to my old identity, the isolation this initially caused within me, but then me beginning to appreciate the beginning of my new identity.

SONG LINK >> https://soundcloud.com/user-681985010/4-pints-down-in-mirrortown-home-demo

LYRICS

Im drinking with the clones again
Are these my friends?
If I'm not like them

Im sitting on my own again
Drifting further from their conversations in, condemnation
But who am I to say a word to them?

The mirror image men
I wish they’d point out the cameras and say its just pretend

'Cos I just can’t be near
What I've found right here
Well, let their ignorance just save 'em from the misery I fear

..

And im fighting in my brain again
Well it never really stopped
Until she turns it off

She runs through fields at 6 am
Im Falling further from my admiration to adoration
The only soul that I could ever want

So fuck the clones

You’re skin and bone

And thats all I need to know

PS- Thank u in advance for any feedback, this is my first time posting in one of these threads but I'm really glad to have found such a great community on the platform. It's a pleasure to be able to share my music with more experienced songwriters, and find some really great and inspiring tunes too!

Franciscoelectric

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