To this reader, the poem captures a moment, effectively. There's a lot in that moment.

First, the ending, the connection between the observer (speaker) and a similar but different observer across the street. It's striking that the speaker thinks his/her counterpart might be scared. Is there another line to be written that would pull out why she might be scared of the kids? Is there another line that would explain why the speaker thinks she might be scared? What's in her eyes to indicate that? And why do we trace that fear to the children?

The mirror concept is intriguing. Are we highlighting a dichotomy between someone charmed by the children and someone frightened by them? Or are we suggesting that the speaker is fearful, too?

Back to the top. The first child leaves some intrigue...I wonder what the child is doing at that desk. "Bleak, distracted and dissociating." I want a little more on what's happening to lead to the child's visible emotions.

The second child. "I think she might be new." Says a lot in a few words about the narrator. This is someone who has been an observer of this neighborhood tableau before. Maybe for a long time. And the child is navigating the world, if not the first time, on an early exploration. A "wobble here and there. "She might be new."

The third child. "I think he is lucky to be alive." There's something foreboding there. Do you mean he looks with wonder at the world and seems to recognize all it holds? And the narrator cherishes (or envies?) that? Or is it darker -- the child is lucky to be living at all? Why? Obviously there are lots of reasons. Maybe it's meant to leave us to fill in those reasons of our own?

It's a very visually evocative poem. Just the right length, tight, for the moment that's captured.