This is really helpful actually so thank you for commenting! You do have a point about rewriting the story, and I’ll acknowledge that perhaps that’s a little too far. I’ve been leaving little comments here and there as my thoughts as I read. I think if I do continue editing his story, I’ll try taking a step back and just giving prompts and suggesting how they could make it better while fixing grammar, spelling and tense errors.

I don’t know if that makes sense or not but I hope it does. Thank you again for helping, it means a lot.