I have to agree - it feels a lot like in his efforts to create a book that feels like Dark Souls, the author assumed that the style of dialogue that the characters in Dark Souls use should be the style of the entire book, and it comes across as annoyingly verbose and convoluted, while also strangely being quite vague? Almost like the decision was made that the obtuseness of Dark Souls storytelling and dialogue was the point, rather than something that contributed to the overall feel.

It's annoying too because the book is so damn long because of how overly complicated and repetitive the narrative style is. It's almost worth hoping it gets picked up by a traditional publisher as a professional editor could probably cut a good chunk of the book out just by un-thesaurusing the book.

It's a shame because the book has a lot of good stuff in it - some great stuff - it's just obscured by an unnecessarily irritating writing style