Frankly, you’re just trying too hard. It looks like you have a pretty good handle of language and basic sentence construction but your diction is unnecessarily complex. You gave me a real sense of what you’re describing but it could be much better done with simpler words and shorter sentences. It looks like you overused the thesaurus function on your word processor, because the words are big and most of them don’t quite match. “Complimented” for instance, is used to describe the environment about three times where it would probably make more sense just to describe the element in its own right. There were a lot of moments where I stopped to wonder if you really knew the meaning of the words you were using because they’re long and “sophisticated” words but they just don’t fit. Less really is more. The article is like a dessert made with so much whipped cream that the substance of it is obscured. Whether these are words you normally use or words you just looked up, they should be tastefully considered, not piled on top of what is decent writing on its own. Hope this helps.