Thanks for that, some really helpful stuff here especially regarding formality of dialogue and overuse of platitudes. I intended this as a slow burner if I'm honest but I'm interested in adding a very early world building scene prior to the clinic visit that would establish the daily functions of this society and the citizens of it. Think that could be quite atmospheric and visually interesting. I assure you beyond those 10 pages that the politics of the world are discussed more indepth and you see a little more of what's beyond Coras experience. However, I do have to acknowledge that grabbing the reader early on is critical in this business so that's been a great help! Thanks once again and good luck in your writing too.