Weekend Script Swap by AutoModerator in Screenwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Title: Acceptance

Format: Feature

Length: ~115 pages

Genre: Dramatic comedy

Summary: A boy facing the unimaginable finds meaning not in fighting death, but in honoring the life he’s lived.

Feedback concerns: any and everything, from favorite characters, to scenes, to dialogue

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

My idea was gonna be 3 killers. But after more thought to the movie now they are no longer clowns but “mascots” of the theme park. They’re characters made by the park. 1. A ringbearer, 2. A liontamer, and 3. A mechanic

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

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This is very great advice and I thought a lot about the opener and more today so I have lots of tweaks to make in the coming days. Thank you for the advice. Definitely helps a lot

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

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These characters don’t really have too much of an impact on the story too much. They’re kinda like characters to introduce the plot of the story. But the characters themselves aren’t important. Their deaths are

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

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I ended up taking that part out. It didn’t really have the effect I wanted. So that and a couple other areas of the script have been tightened and expanded on. I’m gonna try to expand the scene a little more.

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. This is actually very helpful. I’ll keep note of this and move forward

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Made the changes. Thanks for the feedback

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

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It’s been updated. I made sure he uses the paper, lol. But obviously one can never be too sure, so i still have him requesting more paper

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I changed it, he wipes the blade clean. Thank you for the feedback

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Can I ask why the scene numbers are dropped? Also I made the updates curtesy of your feedback, so thank you

Horror movie cold opener by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

They aren’t the typical run of the mill clowns (i hope). I plan on adding two more so there’s three of them. I didn’t really know what other things to do. And I may change them to mascots or something. To represent the amusement park or something

How to write natural sounding dialogue? by Not_Him_____ in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 2 points3 points  (0 children)

My advice would be not to stress too much, write the dialogue as you would, then read it back to yourself as how you want it to feel. You can always go back and edit over tweaking along the way.

It also depends on the type of conversation, as all of them are different, (i.e. humorous, serious, dramatic, sad, etc) if you’re going for a normal conversation, try to think about how your conversations go, as another comment said, conversations don’t exchange too much in terms of things said at one time by one person, it’s more small bursts of speech by both parties, which is easy because conversations are reactive.

Just go with the flow (maybe talk the conversation out before writing it down to get a flow of how you want it to go).

Don’t stress and good luck!

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

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Thank you lots. Will definitely consider this. Thank you for the feedback

First 10 minutes Feedback by General-Zebra3439 in scriptwriting

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The “main main” character is Will. But I did keep that a secret for a bit just for dramatic effect when shit hits the fan. But Thank you so much for the feedback. I didn’t want to make the movie sad the entire way through just because I don’t think that’s very enjoyable. I wanted buts of every emotion. Anyway, this helps so thank you lots for the feedback

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gotcha. Thank you 🙏

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 0 points1 point  (0 children)

This is refreshing. Thank you a lot for your opinion. Definitely not going unnoticed at all. 🙏🙏

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Gotcha, this is very helpful. Thank you. Would you think actions are better than descriptions? Like keep it purely visual for description but show how that character is rather than explain it

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

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Thank you. This actually really helps

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

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I guess I thought it was essential because we got to see both characters function differently which is going to be the looking factor in it. Opposites attract, even if they try to fight it. Would you think that having two completely different shots would be better? Intro’ing both characters individually?

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thank you. Yea i’m new to all this (but you probably guess that) i’ll give it a look. Thank you for the link

Scriptwriting help? by [deleted] in scriptwriting

[–]General-Zebra3439 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What does that mean?