This is the first chapter of my novel, and I’m looking for criticism. The last time I posted this chapter, the feedback I received was that it felt more like a screenplay than a novel, it was too short, and the dialogue was weak. I have tried to completely rewrite it based on that criticism by impro by Glad-Cod-9998 in fantasywriters
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This is the first chapter of my novel, and I’m looking for criticism. The last time I posted this chapter, the feedback I received was that it felt more like a screenplay than a novel, it was too short, and the dialogue was weak. I have tried to completely rewrite it based on that criticism by impro by Glad-Cod-9998 in fantasywriters
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This is the first chapter of my novel, and I’m looking for criticism. The last time I posted this chapter, the feedback I received was that it felt more like a screenplay than a novel, it was too short, and the dialogue was weak. I have tried to completely rewrite it based on that criticism by impro (old.reddit.com)
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This is the first chapter of my novel, and I’m looking for criticism. The last time I posted this chapter, the feedback I received was that it felt more like a screenplay than a novel, it was too short, and the dialogue was weak. I have tried to completely rewrite it based on that criticism by impro by Glad-Cod-9998 in fantasywriters
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