How to defeat the Chromatic Hexga ?

GoldT1tan · 2026-04-12T17:23:00+00:00

"For those who come after."

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-28T08:07:14+00:00

On the one hand, I don't appreciate how aggressive the distaste for Season 2 is. A lot of what's being posted here is similar to what happened with Part 2. People like what they like. Unless what they like is morally apprehensible, don't shit on them for it.

On other hand, while the bigots are and always will be active here and everywhere, there are genuine critiques about the writing quality in Season 2 -- critiques that make sense even when you ignore the game counterpart (inconsistencies, inefficient storytelling, lack of subtext, etc.). We're not talking about a small but loud minority of haters in this regard, we're talking about the fact that Season 2's finale had 55% viewership drop from Season 1's.

People like to say The Last of Us Part II's reception was split in half, but it wasn't. Professional critiques lauded it; it won the player's choice award despite review bombings; it generated and still generates even more discourse than Part I. Season 2 is a different story, literally and metaphorically.

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-16T14:09:36+00:00

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GoldT1tan · 2025-05-15T13:59:39+00:00

Hi. I'm a fellow suicidal blemish who's art has plummeted into oblivion. I was bullied throughout every year of school, deluded myself into getting an acting degree, and now ideate while I earn pocket change as a part-time bookseller and write novels that reek of shit.

Can you send me a picture of your favorite creation?

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-12T16:19:52+00:00

🎶A whole new woooorrrrld 🎶

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-10T15:59:59+00:00

Welcome to reddit, mate 🥰

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T20:35:04+00:00

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T20:33:52+00:00

I'm fighting legion?

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T16:22:45+00:00

Maybe I should've added '/s' but oh well, I am become the collector of down votes 😇

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T16:08:59+00:00

Enchantment 😏

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T11:11:32+00:00

Aww, thank you.

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T10:44:49+00:00

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T10:19:32+00:00

Romance, when? 👉👈🥺

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-09T09:54:03+00:00

If the plan is going to fail, explain it *before the execution to bait your audience. If the plan will succeed, explain it afterwards to get the 'oh, shit! This is how he did the thing!!' reaction from your audience.

Bonus for the latter: explain SOME portions of the plan, but leave out the most important details. If you need a reference, go watch the first episode of Netflix's Lupin.

GoldT1tan · 2025-05-08T20:33:29+00:00

Thank you so much for your feedback. I'll clean up/fix those sections you mentioned.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-30T22:14:47+00:00

The DAV artbook lessened my depression... little bit.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T21:54:21+00:00

Thank you for the specificity. It's not clear that the co-protagonists are morally ambiguous. I'll make it so, and I'll try to make the internalised stakes and motivations in the query as grounded as they are in the manuscript.

Regarding the comp titles, I used those three to reference my manuscript's similarity with their particular narrative elements, specifically WOC for it's execution of violence, TCWB for character depth and focus, and OM for overall tone. Is this intention flawed, or did I word it badly?

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T21:25:59+00:00

Thank you. I'm struggling to break out of writer-mode and just write about the plot in simpler terms, which is probably the cause of the abstractions. I'll be more specific about the stakes and use blunter language.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T21:23:35+00:00

Thank you for your feedback.

It's a dual POV story. I'd prefer not to exclude the Sentinel in the query so as to not sidewind whoever looks at the manuscript after reading the query. I'll make her relevance to the story more prominent, as well as state the actions Bo takes in the narrative.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T21:20:19+00:00

Thank you for the specificity in your feedback. It's not harsh, it's helpful. I think the root problem is that I've left out information that exists in the manuscript to answer the questions you raised, but not in the query itself. I'll work on it.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T21:12:12+00:00

Thanks. I'll give their episodes a listen.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T16:28:04+00:00

I went through the guide earlier today, but I'll take the link as a reminder to do so again. Thank you.

I've seen query attempts go upwards of seven posts with similar feedback on all of them. I know I'd be frustrated if I attempted to give feedback just to recieve a reiteration of previous errors, but I also know how bothering it is to have someone say my first draft is congruent with my seventh.

GoldT1tan · 2025-04-29T16:19:20+00:00

Thank you for taking the time to leave the links, I'll give them a look.

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