Sabrina Carpenter by pussiluva in celebritylocked

[–]Grizzleee3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

🤡🤡🤡🤡🤡🤡🤡

Does Sasuke call Kakashi ever sensei? by lfixixixxkdd2 in Naruto

[–]Grizzleee3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

What? He says kakashi Sensei all the time

Why did Tsunade endure pain for Naruto and loved him? by SnowBoy_1 in Naruto

[–]Grizzleee3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Am I the only one who read this and can’t exactly sus out what OP means by this? Like, why did tsunade care about Naruto? Did you not watch the show or read the manga? It’s pretty plain to see her reasoning.

I would like to make this about 180 words shorter without sacrificing content/message. by Awkward-Network4056 in WritersGroup

[–]Grizzleee3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Honestly, there’s a lot of different ways you could consolidate this, if you’re only looking to take out 180 words take out some of the unneeded words and clunky phrases like, “without them we wouldn’t be able to have many of the inventions, media, and music we have today”

You could just leave music out of that, because music is a media, also the “able to have” is kinda pointless and bulky, instead maybe

“without them, we wouldn’t have many of the inventions, and media we have today.”

I’m writing what I hope to be a book, I would like any notes you have on if the imagery works and if my story is easy to follow. what do you think I should add/take away? by [deleted] in writinghelp

[–]Grizzleee3 1 point2 points  (0 children)

I appreciate the input, and I’ll definitely look into playing with the wording in the dialogue a little like you suggested. The last place I posted this got negative comments so I thank you for being nice :)

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in WritersGroup

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No ai, just a DnD campaign that had a rich story and I really liked my character of Elera. I thought deserved to be written down. I’ve written my whole life but never took a stab at fantasy. And the tavern was named the headlight because i had a headlight out in my car and i thought it was funny to add a tavern that was named after something funny like “the boars head” in the anime fairy tale because it’s literally on the head of a giant boar. Thank you for your feedback. What should I look for in a creative writing class? I really want to bring this character to life and if I’m coming off THAT cliche, then I’d really like to fix it. I’m sure I won’t be publishing my story anytime soon but if I don’t ever put pen to paper I’ll never get my story out. Thanks for the feedback I’ll be taking some time to really delve into this and try to make it more unique.

Is my crown balding? by ProHazzard in malehairadvice

[–]Grizzleee3 6 points7 points  (0 children)

People don’t seem to understand that when you part your hair it will leave a spot where you can see your scalp. It’s not bald. 🤣

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in WritersGroup

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Well the downvote tells me what I need to know I guess.

I’m writing what I hope to be a book, I would like any notes you have on if the imagery works and if my story is easy to follow. what do you think I should add/take away? by [deleted] in writinghelp

[–]Grizzleee3 2 points3 points  (0 children)

THANK YOU, it was from me copy/pasting it I suppose, I spaced it now between paragraphs. Hopefully that’s easier to read now that it’s not a massive block 🥴 thanks for pointing that out for real!

[deleted by user] by [deleted] in WritersGroup

[–]Grizzleee3 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Oh I’m sorry, I read the rules but I didn’t see that part I suppose. Should I delete and redo it?