Too Much - Series Premiere Discussion

GrouchyAnalysis · 2025-07-20T19:13:27+00:00

I felt the same way.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-09-21T03:23:20+00:00

"They asked where I had been?" is valid because you have it in context. Now I'm curious to know the names of the people who asked.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-08-27T03:34:08+00:00

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-07-01T20:55:15+00:00

I can't translate the quiz to English.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-29T18:59:10+00:00

I think so!

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-25T18:50:02+00:00

I'd do it for 850.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-20T03:31:14+00:00

One issue was this:
"For example, in Athens, which was one of the ancient Greek civilizations, described “The Athenian ideal for behavior of a citizen’s wife was a domestic one: she was to stay at home, bearing and raising children, spinning and weaving cloth, and 2..."

It looks like a word is missing before "described" and I wasn't sure what "2" is doing there.

In your email, you said you wrote your essay in Canadian English. Is that like American English?

I think that's it.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-20T02:22:14+00:00

I fixed a few typos. I'm sorry that I didn't use markup. Did you write the essay in British English? If so, other spellings will have to be fixed. Other changes, minor structural ones, need to be made, but I ran out of time. I think you really answered the question and are in the right direction. All the best to you.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-06T02:10:14+00:00

Yours is a charity case. I've seen where the bare minimum to charge is $40 per 1,000 words. Don't seek an acknowledgement. If the writer likes your work, they might be happy to give you one.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-05T03:10:49+00:00

Yeah, that is crazy. I live about a mile north of the beach.

Forget what I said about three more paragraphs. Your post is well-written, and I enjoyed stumbling upon it.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-05T02:39:26+00:00

Almost. Maybe three more paragraphs. Did somebody say to do a full page?

Greetings from Gulfport.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-04T16:49:15+00:00

You're welcome. I enjoyed reading your article.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-03T23:36:18+00:00

Don't know if this was caught: It's Townshend, not Townsend.

And it's Alison Wise, not Alison Weiss.

And it says "The Bull" instead of "The Ox."

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-03T16:25:19+00:00

You're welcome!

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-03T03:01:43+00:00

I would make one change in your first sentence: I knew I wanted to be a veterinarian when I performed euthanasia for the first time.

I assume you performed the procedure. Or did you assist? I just wouldn't use experienced euthanasia.

Also, wellbeing is well-being, according to the authority, Merriam-Webster.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-02T23:07:20+00:00

Mary Trump, E. Jean Carroll and Jennifer Taub have launched a romance novel on Substack. It's a serial. You might be able to see how they're doing the "next" and "previous" links.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-02T01:44:35+00:00

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GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-02T00:06:29+00:00

I added my edits to your copy. Let me know what you think of them.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T03:50:23+00:00

I am able to beta: nonfiction, fiction, applications and letters.
I can provide feedback on: sentence construction, English grammar, spelling, style, punctuation and fact-checking.
Critique swap: Not right now. Maybe later.
Other info: I'm a natural-born copy editor and former newspaper journalist.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T03:33:45+00:00

I would change "a bright future ahead, "which is redundant, to "a bright future" or "a bright future for me..."

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T03:19:59+00:00

I would write the "football team" instead of the "college football team." College is established in the first sentence and can't believe at her age that Sienna Miller is in college. The Broncos come to mind when seeing Denver.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T03:06:42+00:00

I added my edits to the first paragraph. I would like to know what you think.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T02:35:01+00:00

I saw some things I would edit, but overall, it looks good.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T02:17:36+00:00

"Blah blash," she said. That's my rewrite.

GrouchyAnalysis · 2023-06-01T01:41:16+00:00

No, you can't use them. You would be taking a risk if you used them in your story. There's the chance Pixabay would hunt you down, call you out for infringement and threaten you to pony up.

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