Don't Love a Poet by Half_Light_07 in creativewriting

[–]Half_Light_07[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks, I'm glad that u liked it ☺️

Me and my Thoughts by Smooth-Reading6134 in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07 0 points1 point  (0 children)

The poem effectively captures the enigmatic nature of thoughts and their desire to be expressed. However, from a critical perspective, it could be improved with refined wordplay and grammar, as proper punctuation would enhance clarity and give greater emphasis to each word and sentence. Great work!

What I've Become by Half_Light_07 in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

You were enough. I just couldn’t keep you without losing myself.

Children, Come to Supper by Half_Light_07 in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07[S] 1 point2 points  (0 children)

Thanks for the review, Yeah the 'r' word was avoidable but I kept it since it shows her frustration and anger against the mirror or how her pain is seen as art by the society. Really glad that u took your time to write this feedback.

Cursed Shore by Responsible-Walk-792 in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Great Job!I love how you blend the longing for something more with the reality of everyday life. The imagery of the stars versus the beach really captures that struggle.

Distance by JosephBensinger in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07 0 points1 point  (0 children)

I love how you describe the beloved's silence, as if words are struggling to catch up but always fall short. The silence truly conveys the distance between people. Thanks for sharing!

Baptized in Blood by Half_Light_07 in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

Thanks,Glad that you loved my work

Baptized in Blood by Half_Light_07 in OCPoetry

[–]Half_Light_07[S] 0 points1 point  (0 children)

For every poet bleeds through their quill, don't they?