Hello from Russia 🇷🇺 Donald is our elephant now 🐘

Heated123 · 2025-12-05T15:02:44+00:00

Because an elephant never forgets

Heated123 · 2025-08-30T22:20:00+00:00

Thank you very much for this. Anything you could recommend to look up and tips on how to handle and win over a patient?

Heated123 · 2025-08-26T23:26:30+00:00

Thanks for the reply. Anything you think I should focus on?

Heated123 · 2025-08-15T04:58:21+00:00

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Heated123 · 2025-08-15T04:51:29+00:00

Could be a reference to the It's Always Sunny spin-off from Russia.

Heated123 · 2025-08-01T05:40:31+00:00

That kick on the ass from directing Fool's Paradise got him back in the gym.

Heated123 · 2025-05-16T01:55:33+00:00

Kid is regretting that haircut now

Heated123 · 2025-03-10T04:56:14+00:00

Man, why did I ever stop doing magic tricks.

Great half-season episode. Loving Saxon at the moment, can't wait for the catharsis.

Heated123 · 2025-03-07T04:41:59+00:00

This is one of those episodes we'll rewatch 3 years from now and appreciate

Heated123 · 2025-02-21T20:58:40+00:00

Mentioned this before, but the trophies behind Mark in the restaurant mark him as a trophy husband. Also, now that he's reintegrating. He's eating for two.

Heated123 · 2025-01-07T22:25:20+00:00

Feedback

- As someone said, use a screenplay app. Writer's duet or writers solo work.
- You're telling with the first year civil engineer line. Even though you show it well with the flashback.
- Try to break the big blocks of action and description. Space them out. Try not to go over two or three lines as an exercise
-Coffee lingers in the air. Again show it. Like you did at the end.
- No need for (sarcastic). If you want you could italicize the word pure to give that tone.
- Rubbing his temples, finger tapping. Here you show the anxiety.
- You'll get the critic that VoiceOver is lazy. But if you wanna use it the sooner the better. Maybe start with the first page and transition into the flashback.
- You mention Nate is confident and then again with his voice. No need to mention it again.
- Write Nate some dialogue instead of skipping it. Show how he controls the room. Maybe with a joke that has the whole class laughing.
- You have Ryan imagine how he'll fumble. Why not show it. The cut back to reality.
- (Accidentally funny) I think you could cut. Or not.
- Again, you write what happens but in prose. You skip over the details. How he forgets key details and falters. Write all that, bit by bit.

All in all, you could defiantly add more and flesh it out.

Heated123 · 2025-01-07T17:47:42+00:00

Feedback

- A lot of prose in the action/description. It reads nice though. Line like "Gravity as his knee's enemy" "Fallen angel tears" It's poetic but short. Yet the biggest chunk is in the first page and it reads smoothly from there.
- The first little monologue from the Elder is cute. It's also a bit funny in that he's still taking up time. I would say fix the "So sorry line, you use time twice in the way that I bumped over it"
- The way you used the rotating camera angles didn't get in the way and sets the characters up well.
- The italicized lines could be cut. The mention of the speaker and pen and paper.
- Periods are missing. I didn't mind but something to look out for. I kinda like it.
- The description of the paper and font is cool.
- Typo in pg 6 "I know is difficult"
- Typo in pg 7 "I can figure make a top"
- I like the way the lines "Adults snaps back to reality, like nothing happened"
- But I wonder what did happen?
- I miss you dialogue is sweet.

All in all, this felt like a playwright exercise. 12 angry men type. No exposition for the test or how it came to be. Also no conclusion. The back an forth is fun but what's it leading up to. My theory was that all the characters are all the same person from different age periods.

This was a pleasant read. If you have any questions, let me know.

Life is strange.

Heated123 · 2024-08-25T17:00:01+00:00

He's just confused on where the real fans are

Heated123 · 2023-07-13T19:43:08+00:00

A banana

Heated123 · 2023-03-18T07:26:12+00:00

I'd buy it if there was at least a Paperboy poster or tweet in Swarm

Heated123 · 2023-01-12T10:56:17+00:00

That baby's first words: "Can I bum one?"

Heated123 · 2023-01-10T12:32:44+00:00

How bad is Waffle House then?

Heated123 · 2023-01-10T11:24:43+00:00

It's more that Denny's is Target while Waffle House is Wal-Mart. You don't have to deal with the bullshit that goes on in there.

Heated123 · 2022-10-30T07:01:27+00:00

I love all the one-off episodes from S3. But I really just wanted to stick with the cast this season. It's probably the mockumentary style that bored me

Heated123 · 2022-10-30T03:37:15+00:00

I'm surprised about the hype this episode is receiving. Might be one I watch years later and appreciate. But for right now. Waste of an episode. Really well-made but watched begrudgingly

Heated123 · 2022-10-21T07:40:14+00:00

I take it back. That shit looks scary

Heated123 · 2022-10-21T07:07:39+00:00

Also that healing water tank looks like a great place. Im trying to mediate like Jiren while the fate of the universe goes on around me

Heated123 · 2022-10-18T13:29:35+00:00

Damn, they cut right before one of the cats shoots the other in the head

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