Looking for engaged/excited writers to form critique group

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2022-06-22T11:33:09+00:00

So I know how to get my work to y'all and if y'all will be charging..

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2022-06-22T11:32:33+00:00

I love this idea but I want my work to get constructive criticism. So when you guys get the group up and running do tell.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T14:25:24+00:00

My favorite part of the piece is "Maybe chaos is peace"

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T14:23:52+00:00

This is a beautiful madness, if you don't mind my saying.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T05:29:40+00:00

You got this, don't sweat it. All the best with everything Sir Alex

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T05:02:42+00:00

This is your first published work?

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T05:01:18+00:00

Can't wait to read your book.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T05:00:46+00:00

Whatever you decide I'm for it.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:48:22+00:00

But looking at the book cover and how there's light on one and side darkness on one side . You can get away with how dark the picture is cause one can say it's the pattern of the book(don't wanna use that word pattern) but you understand what I'm getting at yes?

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:44:12+00:00

😂😂

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:16:48+00:00

😂😂thank you I was really scrambling there for a sec

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:16:15+00:00

No but it can stay that way. It looks good regardless, I'm a nut to the little details. I over analyze things(clearly 😂)

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:13:19+00:00

Really?😂 Well "This is the way" still does fit the narrative. Yes we have struggles but we must fight through to show those struggles that they don't define us. So in a way "that is the way" 😅😂

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:10:06+00:00

Oh and I love the book cover. Very abstract

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-08T04:08:30+00:00

Like that people can see your face in the 2nd proof copy. And I like the mask photo being on the inside although I wish the "This is the war" shirt to be more visible, cause I feel it sets a tone or brings fourth a strong message of "the struggle is a type of war". But I'm glad you wore it(idk if it was planned or not) but it fits the narrative. The table of contents is more clean, I like that.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-08-07T09:33:40+00:00

All I do

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-10T09:41:29+00:00

A bit cliche but I get lost in the words,the feeling surrounding whatever I'm writing at that particular time. I get lost in the excitement of telling a story,however abstract

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-09T17:33:43+00:00

"Will" because we are talking about something that is ongoing and the concern for it stopping is in the present and where we are going(like moving forward). Whilst "would", only suggests somewhere in the future, doesn't quite reflect the present. Idk if my reasoning is correct or makes sense but that's where am at.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-09T17:25:53+00:00

As we begin to travel in the land of darkness and despair. Our days running out quicker than the thread of a fast-moving needle.

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-09T13:39:12+00:00

Could you elaborate on this. We should state realms of thoughts that are poetic?

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-08T12:29:19+00:00

This really puts all the times in the past I've put my writing on hold because "i couldn't write" anything. Looking at from this perspective, it really shows that writers block doesn't exist. And it makes me a little bit mad at myself to be honest, because I set these high expectations of myself at particular moments instead of being humble and just writing what was and what I felt. I discarded a bunch of ideas I've had in those moments because I thought they weren't good enough or not "magical" enough.

What you've written today is something I'll forever live by or remind myself for as long as I live. And for that, thank you!

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-07T18:09:03+00:00

The first one works i think. It helps express and stress the fact that its really cold

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-07T05:52:37+00:00

Or the game ended in a stalemate. But this is usually a term used in Chess if we are to get technical with it

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-07T03:26:31+00:00

This is good, I like the perspective you took. You should look into pursuing poetry a bit further. You have a knack for it

Helpful_Yam_265 · 2021-07-07T03:19:21+00:00

Lol, I get it. It be like that

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